Disclaimer: I'm not going to pretend I can cover
everything that passes through FFML. Omission implies
nothing about my opinion concerning any fic. The
Review format is simply a way to give multiple
short comments without flooding the list with
multiple messages.
Subject:
[FFML] [Fanfic][Sailor-m] Shades of the Soul
Date:
Tue, 20 Apr 1999 11:25:19 -0400
From:
Trevor Laughlin <laughlin@accessv.com>
Description: Sailor Moon and co are up against a new opponent,
sorceresses who encourage and feed from emotions like fear and
envy. But the real story about a new sorceress who might join
either side. Will she choose to feed from despair or hope?
Comments: Looks promising, however the author should bear in mind
that Sailor Moon does have the power to return magically transformed
humans to their previous selves.
On the technical side, I noticed a couple of very trivial errors, on
the order of "What ever" rather than "Whatever". Nothing very
noticeable.
Subject:
[ffml][Ranma]Ranma Dwarf
Date:
Tue, 20 Apr 1999 13:52:02 +0000
From:
Kai Yamazaki <NC015136@newcollege.co.uk>
Description: Ryoga, Asuza and Kodachi, three criminals exiled to
space aboard the mining ship Red Dwarf, are the only survivors of
a radiation leak. It's a comedy.
Comments: The author is just having way too good a time. I wonder
when it will occur to Ryoga that he doesn't have the option of choosing
one or the other? He has to choose both if he wants the human race
to continue. This could get old very fast, or be entertaining, hard to
say at this point.
However, the technical end has some problems. Grammar, spelling,
punctuation and formatting all could use some more work.
Subject:
[FFML][FanFic][Xover Ranma 1/2 / Wing Commander]The Awry
Mission: Part 2
Date:
Tue, 20 Apr 1999 04:40:28 -0800
From:
"RPG Maniac" <rpgmniac@psxrocks.com>
Description: The Kilrathi demand fish sausage from the Player Character
and the Nerima's fighter pilots. PC finds out just how Ranma becomes such
a fearsome pilot against the cat people.
Comments: So Ranma does that all the time? The fighter combat scenes work
better than the comedy element, which seems forced. It might
work better if the author tried to integrate it more smoothly into
the story, such as having the flight escorting a freighter with an unknown
cargo, having the Kilrathi offer to let them go if they'll
just have the freighter jettison the cargo, make it sound really
important, and it turns out to be the fish sausage.
On the technical end, "hurricane" is spelled with an "e" and
"scissors" is spelled with a "c".
Subject:
[FFML] [Ranma][Fic] Soul of Ice: Synthesis-- Success
Date:
Tue, 20 Apr 1999 04:15:22 -0400
From:
Matthew Lewis <maybeso@ican.net>
Description: Ranma chooses to learn from both Happosai and Cologne,
and gets kind of weird.
Comments: Frankly I can't see why everyone would be so upset by Ranma
being so good and growing up a little.
Subject:
[FFML] [Impro] Furniture Warriors : Part I, II, and III
Date:
Mon, 19 Apr 1999 22:23:36 -0700
From:
Twoflower <twoflowr@ikkoku.maison-otaku.net>
Description: Heroic practitioners of furniture martial arts prepare to battle the
forces of evil. Based on a less than famous Playstation game.
Comments: Very funny. Too bad the author lost interest before actually
getting to the tournament.
Subject:
[FFML] [FML][TEASER][R.5] Hail of Bullets
Date:
Tue, 20 Apr 1999 01:11:26 -0400 (EDT)
From:
Jed Bidwell <Jedediah@tri-countynet.net>
Description: A Yakuza gunfight leads to Ukyo getting accidentally shot
in the back four times.
Comments: Ranma versus the Mob is a story that almost begs to be
written. However, I have to wonder why ten gangsters had to get
together in a public place to make a simple exchange. With those
kind of numbers why were't they meeting someplace where the cops
wouldn't
notice?
Subject:
[FFML][fanfic][repost ... again][TM]Mugen Tenchi Muyo!
Episode #1: No Need For New Arrivals!
Date:
Mon, 19 Apr 1999 21:55:31 -0700
From:
"Joe (Chi-Ohki) McKenzie" <muriyaki@geocities.com>
Description: A bad guy shows up. Another bad guy shows up.
They play nasty jokes with shapeshifting powers. Then they blow
up a Juraian fleet. Then they take everyone to a mirror universe.
Comments: Very uneven tone with characterisation that does not seem
believable to me. Badly formatted. Some spelling errors. I don't
like the present-tense format, either.
Subject:
[FFML] [Ranma][Fanfic] Eidolons - Three
Date:
Tue, 20 Apr 1999 00:21:40 -0400
From:
Alan Harnum <harnums@thekeep.org>
Description: Ranma, freed of Neko-ken personality, can't leave
H.P. Lovecraft's Dreamlands until he repays Bast by doing her a service.
Comments: One is not supposed to switch betweeen present and past tense
that way. This story is an example of another basic rule of writing,
though. If you're good enough, you can make anything work.
Subject:
[FFML] [Fanfic][RPML-2025] RPML-2025 Episode 2: A War of
Shadows
Date:
Mon, 19 Apr 1999 23:56:49 -0400 (EDT)
From:
peter@cujo2.icom.ca (Petes)
Description: Cyberpunk characters run around and shoot at each other,
while wealthy and powerful people talk a lot and Shampoo gets out the
turkey-baster.
Comments: Too many characters. Too many scene shifts. Not enough
focus. Oh, and I don't care who you are, giving a -sama to the
Empress of Japan is appropriate. I might mention that having Shampoo
become Empress of Japan is a bit of a stretch.
Subject:
[FFML] [spamfic][Ranma][Morning Sun][Short & Silly]
Date:
Mon, 19 Apr 1999 23:51:12 -0400
From:
"KaraOhki" <karaohki@snet.net>
Description: Ranma and Akane discover that their parents seem to have a
little problem adjusting to new circumstances.
Comments: Very funny initial twist. Might have been better to end it there.
Subject:
[FFML] [teaser][eva] Neon Genesis Rock and Role
Date:
Mon, 19 Apr 1999 22:29:34 -0500
From:
doug_w@mail.geocities.com
Description: Shinji Ikari is a Kurt Kobain-like singing star tapped
to become an Evangelion pilot. Looks like he's going to get laid a lot
Comments: Anything that changes Shinji's personality has to be an improvement.
Actually, Misato sending him a cheesecake picture makes a lot more sense now.