Here's a shortshort piece that, once again, popped up nearly
fully-formed in the back of my mind as I was drifting off to sleep.
See?  Keeping a pen and pad of paper next to your bed is a good thing.

Comments?  Please feel free to email. ^_^

Andrew: This is a delightful piece of work. It is our pleasure to 
        comment on it.
WoLF  : Hey! You're the pervert, not me.

NOTE! I've added the [LIME] tag due to the suggestive nature of your story.

WoLF  : A good idea. Wouldn't want to scare the kiddies and make them ask 
        embarrassing questions. ^_~

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   The two sisters sat drinking tea together.

   The elder spoke.

   "So?  How big?"

Andrew: Like I said, LIME.

   "No, no, I mean, _how big_?"  The elder sister accompanied the
question with a very obvious motion of her hands.

WoLF  : How about:

     "No, no! I mean... _how big_?" the elder sister accompanied the 
question with outrageously obvious hand movements.

Andrew: This is Urd... she does everything BIG. ^_~
WoLF  : <whispers under his breath> hentai.




WoLF  : And what's with this huge space right here before a few minutes 
        in silence.

   A few minutes passed in silence.

Andrew: I'm not sure what the delay is about. Although she seems to be 
        impressed, I expect that Urd would dive in with more questions.
        She is a pervert and likes to know the gory details.

   "See?  Aren't you glad we had that little talk before your
wedding?"  An ear-to-ear grin matched the blush of the other.

Andrew: Heh... match-maker to the end.

   "The next morning, I--"  She was interrupted again by another noise

>from her elder sister.  "Are you sure you are alright?"

   Clearing her throat, the woman spoke.  "No!  Er, yes, yes, I'm fine!
Please continue.   Don't mind me."

Andrew: I don't get this part. What noise did Urd make in the first place?

   Looking down into her teacup, she continued.  "The next morning, I
tried one of the things you spoke of.  I know he enjoyed it a great
deal, and I thought it was rather interesting, except it did get rather
stuffy beneath the blanket--"

   The spray of tea across the room was interrupted by the young man
who had just slid open the door.  "Gee, thanks, Urd," he commented,
looking down at his damp feet.

Andrew: This paragraph is very confusing. The first time, I though it was
        Keichii spitting the tea. Only after reading it a couple of times
        did I see it was Urd.

WoLF  : I would've thought it was Keichii too since I wouldn't expect Urd
        to be surprised by such activity.

Andrew: Then again, it is Belldandy we're talking about.

WoLF  : Let me clue you into a little secret. "It's always the quite ones
        you have to watch out for."

Andrew: You know... I think you have a point.

WoLF  : <grins>

   "Keiichi!" exclaimed the younger of the two women, jumping to her
feet and running over and into her husband's arms.

WoLF  : There is a bit of a verb confusion here. You may want to split 
        the sentence so it reads:

"Keichii!" exclaimed the younger of the two women. She jumped to her feet
and ran over to her husband and leapt into his waiting arms.

   With a grin, he gave his wife a quick kiss.  "Hi, Bell.  Ready for
our dinner out tonight?"

   Taking her husband's arm, the young goddess accompanied him out of
the room. "Of course!"

WoLF  : Right here you should add that we hear Keichii and Belldandy's
        retreating voices.

   "What was with Urd, anyways?"

   "I'm not quite sure... we were just talking about..."

   As the voices faded, the silver-haired goddess regained a bit of
self-control, and fanned herself lightly.

   "Now who would have thought that..."

WoLF  : I'm not entirely convinced that Urd would be THAT shocked... 
        especially if she was the one to suggest the idea.

Andrew: But it's Belldandy... you now, the queen of innocence.

WoLF  : I'm sorry bud... but even in the anime, she sinned and was punished
        by God. She's not that innocent.

Andrew: Hmmmmm... well... maybe....

^_^


I liked the fic. Aside for a couple of distracting passages where I wasn't
sure who was talking, it was great. Thanks for the fun read.

Keep writing! Gambatte ne?

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