Hey all.

Subject:
        [FFML] [Fanfic][Ranma][Revised] Mirror, mirror. Prologue and Part 1.
  Date:
        Sat, 17 Apr 1999 14:11:40 +0800
  From:
        Michael Ricketts <ricketts@upnaway.com>

Description:  Botched cure causes Ranma to arrive in two bodies with only one
soul.

Comments:  Very good, actually.  Interesting variant, doesn't dawdle.

On the technical side, the logic of how the author inserts blank lines
escapes me.  Also in the second part I noticed:

Blank lines are an indication on my part of a change of scene... This holds true
in the prologue and first part, unfortuanately, in the second part, for some
reason, a few crept in where I really didn't want them. The wrapper that I use
decided to insert three (that I saw) that weren't actually supposed to be there
(two in the 2nd scene and one at the end of another scene)...

    Akane's face instantly took on an even guiltier look as she started

babbling out what had happened in the bathroom. As Genma sorted

    The door slid open behind him and Ranma stepped into the room.

    "Pop, tell them the truth." The voice came from both the red

Neither of these places are supposed to have blank lines between them.

    "Watch where you're going Pig-boy!" Ranma whispered harshly,
swatting him on the back of the head.
    "Don't stop suddenly Ranma!" Ryouga whispered back, punching
him in the gut.

There should be commas before "Pig-Boy" and "Ranma".

Oops, inserted as of now...

Later,
    Mike.