Subject: Re: [FFML] [Ranma][Dragon Ball Z] [Please C&C]A Human Super Saiyajin - Chapter 1. A New Day |
From: "Kevin Kelly" <hibiki_ryouga@hotmail.com> |
Date: 4/14/1999, 2:21 AM |
To: pedrajas@earthlink.net |
CC: ffml@fanfic.com |
Your writing and style are pretty good, and I like the idea of Ranma/ DBZ crossovers, but the first chapter leaves alot in the way of plot to be desired, your title doing most of the foreshadowing. Maybe you should consider combining it with another chapter or two? --Kevin Kelly Hibiki_Ryouga@hotmail.com _______________________________________________________________ Get Free Email and Do More On The Web. Visit http://www.msn.com