Subject: Re: [FFML] [Ranma][Dragon Ball Z] [Please C&C]A Human Super Saiyajin - Chapter 1. A New Day
From: "Kevin Kelly" <hibiki_ryouga@hotmail.com>
Date: 4/14/1999, 2:21 AM
To: pedrajas@earthlink.net
CC: ffml@fanfic.com

Your writing and style are pretty good, and I like the idea of Ranma/
DBZ crossovers, but the first chapter leaves alot in the way of plot 
to be desired, your title doing most of the foreshadowing. Maybe you 
should consider combining it with another chapter or two?

--Kevin Kelly
Hibiki_Ryouga@hotmail.com




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