| Subject: Re: [ffml][fic][ranma][drama]Cats have no tears Chapter 1/7 C&C requested |
| From: David Johnston |
| Date: 4/13/1999, 4:51 AM |
| To: Allyn Yonge |
| CC: ffml@fanfic.com |
I'd say delete the stuff about the "high crimes". It's irrelevant, given that Akane has committed none of the crimes mentioned. That means of course that what Cologne is doing doesn't qualify as justice, merely convenience. At most, just have her say, "The technique is based on the harshest punishment in Amazon lore," and go straight into her reminiscence of the only time she'd used it before. Cut the fat.