Hoi,

(snip main body of story)

   Jubei looked about the small room with little interest.  It 
wasn't any different from any other room he'd ever seen.  The tatami 
was a warmer than the ground outside, but that was of little 
consequence.  The ronin didn't even move as the door behind him

Good begining.  Plausable middle.  Abrupt ending.  I'm wondering 
because of the lack of a period at the end of this last sentance if
the rest of the stoy got cut off or something.  If this was the 
intended ending point for this section, I clap my hands together 
before you and humbly beg your continuation of the story.

***    Knife Sharpens on Stone... Man Sharpens on Man     *** 
***    - Tao                                              *** 
 
Jayden Stormwalker 



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