Hello there,

Well, it looks like we've finally reached the end of this epic sized story.
It is nice to finally reach the end but I will miss reading new chapters.
What do we have up our sleeves now?  :)

These comments have probably already been touched on by others
but on the off chance they have not:

It looked over each one. The girl would have been satisfactory under normal
circumstances, but the man next to her was the real  prize.

Extra space before the word prize.

"She's going to be Shampoo Saotome after today," Ranma informed her as he
persuaded Shampoo to release him before she wrinkled his suit.

"I still think Ranma Pu has a better ring to it."

Does that make Shampoo - Shampoo Pu?

We could make a deal where the two of  you can become
official models and makes tons of money.

Extra space 'two of- you'.

"It's crap," Nabiki corrected. "It's not even cubic zirconium. How can you
possibly feel satisfied with a piece of junk like this?"
"Ranma picked it out all by himself," Shampoo insisted as she shook her

Needs and extra line between paragraphs.

Shampoo spoke from behind him. "Ranma, meet me my mother, Comb."

Don't need the 'me'.

voice to our desires and opinions, but we always loved each other. Your
mother knew that. And it certainly made life interesting."
"'Interesting' translates into 'trouble'. You're just lucky he didn't pick
up and abandon you like most men would. And even then it was probably

Needs and extra line between para's.  Oh, and:
Ranma prodded yet again, "What about egotistical?!"  Mwahahahaha

"He was scum that wasn't worthy to lick my boots."


"Of course, Mother." Shampoo said still backing away.

An extra line in there.

"That bitch he claimed was better than me was an ugly, weak, honorless
whore that if I had thought about it, would have killed for daring to

Hmm, I think this could be reworded a tad.

...honorless whore who, had I thought about it, I would have killed...

aren't going to sleep with him before the wedding, you can break him in by
giving him blow-jOW!" Ai rubbed her side where Ukyou had elbowed her.

You were going to say blow-up doll, yes?  ;>

"Didn't you know? Your name translates into 'Gelded Horse'."

LOL, original comment.  <G>

granddaughter. I had always been suspicious of Shampoo's convenient

'death' right before she would have been brought back home and asked some

Extra line in there.

Cologne waved Shampoo-kun on

Shampoo-kun has a bit more mass than Shampoo, yes?  How is that dress
holding faring?

Yohko nodded her head solemnly, and she had not even been there. "They say
that in case something happens to this guy,  they have a second priest in

Extra space after the second comma.

"It is yours, actually ours, by the way.

I think it might sound better as 'It is yours, well, ours actually by the way.'

That ending bit with sexually pent up Ranma was too funny. :)  At this point,
Shampoo doesn't know that she had the kid with Kasumi, does she?  Seemed
that Silk was considering telling her....

Wonderful series.  I'm sorry to see it end but I'm also looking forward to
more stories from you.

Keep up the great work!


Warr

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