Just a few notes on your formatting....
see below  (1) (2) (3) (4)

				     Chapter One: Second Chances (1)
(2)   	�Did you manage to find anything fresh to eat?� asked Asuka 
in a weakened voice her futon as Shinji entered their home. Home it was in 
another apartment building that was only a few blocks away from their old 
one. After Third Impact, Asuka and Shinji tried living in the same apartment 
that they shared with Misato during happier days but the memories were too 
much for either of them to bear. (3)
Asuka had memories of insulting Shinji and the other two stooges but those 
weren�t the ones that got to her. She cried every time she thought Kaji but 

      (4)


1) It seems that you're centered on the right side.
2) Your indent on paragraphs is massive, and
   in place of quotes, you have ^S
3) Is this supposed to be a new paragraph?  You
   forgot to indent.
4) the ^R instead of ' I am guessing.

To summarize your problem, you didn't convert this to
a true text document before you sent it, and it'd be
safe to say that a large amount of the list saw your
story as messy in format as I did, probably worse.

I know this isn't as satisfying as C&C on your
plot and such, but you've gotta understand it's
extremely important that your formatting be readable
by everyone.

Save as text only with line breaks if you're using
micro$oft word, and take a look at it with
textpad or dosedit to make sure it comes off
clean.

Also don't forget 70 is generally accepted as a
standard width, though going smaller is okay.
Go wider than 80 columns and it gets messy for
everyone.

Once you clean this thing up, I'll C&C it.

-rod m