The most important thing I have gathered from your mail is that you lack a
theme. A guiding concept. What is the underlying tone of this story? Is it
a war story? A romance? Adventure? Pick a concept to work with and stick
with it. It will make your job of writing this fic a LOT easier.

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From: Kagato <steven@athenet.net>
To: wolf@sbm.org; palpatine@gizmo.axis.org; garyee@mbox4.singnet.com.sg
Subject: Ranma/Nuku/Starcraft Story
Date: Thursday, October 01, 1998 12:04 PM

First of all I would like to thank all of you for your C&C, and my
apologies for taking so long to get this message out.  Here is my general
idea of where i'm going with the story so far, if you could please email

me

back with what you think of these ideas.  First of all in chapter 2 the
zerg hit earth hard with a beginning invasion force which is repelled

after

a tough battle.  Akane, Ryunosuke(Nuku's "Little brother") are captrued

by

the zerg, this is incentive to get them to join the military.  A military

Who are the "them" you are referring to? How are Akane and Ryunosuke freed?
The Zerg destroy all that lay in their path, it is highly unlikely that
they will take prisoners, let alone allow them to survive long enough for a
rescue attempt.

expedition is sent out on 4 Leviation Battle Cruisers(The famous ship

from

Star Craft with the Yamato cannon) and a horde of lesser transports. 

Ranma

landing on a unknown planet with a small group of others has to watch as
the others gets decimated by the zerg, and he goes into hidding for a

time,

Why? This sounds a little OOC for Ranma. He'd probably rush into the fight
if there were lives at stake no matter the cost. Of course, if he were
FORCED to watch helplessly as his friends were decimated......

till he is eventually found by the Protoss.  Intrigued by his chi

abilities

and skills they give him the a protoss power gem(The center piece of

Zealot

armor which grants them the shields that they have) and he is taught to

use

Zealot si blade and meets Tassadar.  Meanwhile the human battle ships

have

No matter how impressed they are by Ranma, he must EARN these gifts. The
Protoss are on the ropes throughout most of the storyline, they cannot
AFFORD to throw away valuable technology. You cannot afford to make such
huge plot holes in your storyline. 

One reasonable scenario is that Ranma is "adopted" by the Protoss. The
Zealots and the Templars live by a code of honour, one that is very close
to Ranma's heart. The Psi Blades and Power Gems mark him as one who is
accepted by the Protoss.....and ultimately he probably will have to fulfill
the role of ambassador of the Protoss to the wary humans. After all, if one
alien race attacked your planet, how trusting would you be if another alien
race conveniently appeared at the right time to offer assistance? 

settled on a planet much like earth and establish the first of of Sol
system colony and they start producing heavy war machinery.  Well this is
all i really have planned at this point but there will be a small battle

on

the war through space between zerg/humans.  And humans and protoss are

I want to point out at this point that all the other characters most
probably think that Ranma is dead and act accordingly. This action scenes
have a lot of potential for pathos as a grieving Akane fights like one
possessed to assuage her pain. This could also unite the Ranma's Fiancee
Club as all of them carry the memory of a certain pig-tailed baka who had
captured their heart. A situation like this could very easily lead to them
becoming friends. What will happen to their friendship when Ranma
resurfaces? That, honoured wordsmith is your tale to tell. 

going to me more of allies than in the computer game, and the zerg are
going to be well a hundred times tougher.  If you have time please email

me

back and tell what you think of this place or anything that might make it
better or side plots, trying to fit some in.  Thanks for your time

Kagato
Destory of Jurai
"You've won boy"-Kagato
"Love is the easiest thing to feel, but the hardest thing to say...."
"Everybodies got to be something, me I'm stupid, thats all I've ever

wanted

to be"
email: steven@athenet.net
<Insert favorite quote here>

How about Nuku Nuku? Is she going to be a sideline character? She's a
useful character in her own right (as well as the star of 1/3 of this
crossover). If Ranma is forced to watch as others are slain, he'd probably
slip into a deep depression and who better to raise him out of it than
Nuku? There is a possibility that love could develop between those two and
this could be the driving force in this story. Imagine Ranma admitting to
his fiancees that he's passing them up for an android (I can picture the
carnage now.....). Nuku is a very formidible fighter and I'd bet that the
Protoss would be just as interested in an android like Nuku as in Ranma's
abilities. If Nuku is upgraded with Protoss technology, she would be
well-nigh unstoppable, a match for a unit as powerful as Sarah Kerrigan.
Imagine Nuku configured to act as an Arbitrator Tribunal <shudder>. 

Love developing between Ranma and Nuku is your best bet for a storyline.
Why bother to make a crossover with Nuku Nuku if the title character sits
on the bench and watches the rest slug it out with the Zerg? Ranma's social
ineptness and Nuku's naivete are a wonderfully interesting combination. Add
that to an interstellar war and you have a gist of a story.

I hope that my comments prove to be useful to you.

Regards,
Mechamorph.