From: "Christopher Angel" <cja124@mail.usask.ca>
To: "Anand Rao" <anandr@mminternet.com>, <ffml@fanfic.com>
Subject: Re: [FFML] [Fanfic][Ranma][REVISED]A Stained Glass Mind
[1/?]
Date: Wed, 7 Apr 1999 13:25:17 -0600
Welp....
Let me start off by saying your writing has _really_ improved, Anand.
Thank you, Chris. That comment alone means a great deal to me.
That's been a huge goal for me over the past couple of years.
As for the characterizations, having recently re-read the Tribe of
Oneseries from TSR, I'd like to make a suggestion - one you'll
probably ignore, but I think it is valid:
I won't ignore it completely. :) You definitely gave me some ideas
which will be incorporated in future parts.
something a bit more...Ranma-esque? How about a pure girl
personality like the one Ranma "became" when he was knocked on the
head one too many times?
I always thought that particular aspect came more from his upbringing
and his perceptions of how women should act. In 'Stained Glass Mind,'
he was brought up a bit differently, and has a completely different
outlook where women are concerned.
Or instead of making Shade merely survivalistic, how about giving
him a bit more of an...evil aspect? A bit of cruelty and the like.
I had tried to hit on this later on in the fic during the first go,
but you're right. I'll be showing that more and more of that and a
bit earlier as well.
Hell, how about having something suitably Zen come out of Master's
mouth every once in a while?
:) Thanks. This is probably gonna happen.
As for your ending of the original...well, while it was
unsatisfying, it did have a certain charm. I'd be careful in
tossing it completely, IMO.
I'm still up in the air about the ending. My -main- mistake, (not
taking into account opinions of the story line,) was that I rushed
it. I know that. Not so this time around.
Good work on the re-write, looking forward to more.
Thanks for the comments, Chris. Good to hear from you!
-Anand
Anand Rao
anandr@mminternet.com
anandr@deranged-otaku.com
http://www.deranged-otaku.com/
"He's a sex object. He asks for sex and women object."
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