This is a very, very interesting idea.  Knowing
this is a revision makes it hard for me to say that
I think you glossed over the training in the village 
too much so you could get to "the kicker": Ranma
and the Tribe falling into the Spring of 
Incredibly Nubile Young Girl. :)  Ryoko as a character

No worries on that score. Criticism is -always- welcome.  

I guess the training and the villiage (even Ryoko at this point of 
time,) didn't feel all that important to me.  Hence the fast and easy 
exposition.  I really just wanted to get Ranma to the point and time 
where the Manga starts, showing a tad bit of the events before hand 
instead of using flashbacks later on.  

doesn't seem fleshed out enough for me to say wheter
or not I like her.  Any chance the Saotomes
are related to Kyosuke Kasuga?

Huh.  That hadn't even occurred to me.  Maybe it's worth pursuing. . 
. (in a side story some time.  ;) )

Thanks for the comments!

-Anand



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