Elsa Bibat <aerolbj@epic.net> wrote:
Point of view is next. It has great bearing on the plot since this is how the plot is
set before the reader. First person and Second person views limits the reader's information
to one person, while Third person gives the reader the big view.
Whoa. That depends on what kind of third person it is. There's Third
Person with an omniscient narrator, which does indeed show the "big
view" -- or as much of it as the writer chooses. But Third Person
Limited restricts the narration to the perceptions of one character at a
time.
As I've told Biles, I really should have reread this baby before sending it out. Blame it on
the Milo, Ovaltine and Tang concoction in my stomach.
What POV to use is your choice, yes, but which one tells your story the
best is a (sort of) objective matter. I've seen a lot of fics written in
omniscient perspective that IMO would've worked better with a limited
third person.
I may write and post an essay on narrative POV if people are interested
in seeing it.
I'd love to see it. Go ahead !From aerolbj@epic.net Tue Apr 6 09:27:43 1999
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From: Elsa Bibat <aerolbj@epic.net>
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Subject: RE: [FFML][Repost][Shortfic][Tenchi] A New Lab Assistant
Date: Tue, 6 Apr 1999 18:30:41 +0800
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Fourth victim of the day !
Bwahahahaha !!!
Oops ! Sorry let me try that again.
BWAHAHAHAHAHAHA !!!!
"NO! STOP!" Washuu shouted as she lunged for the control panel. Too late.
The computer screen printed out the words: Begin Missile Launch. Washuu
hit the inventory file to see which one had fired.
"ARRRGH!!! That was the Luscious Lavender flavor!"
My favorite color... But isn't it color not flavor.
Washuu was more than a little put out by the events of the morning. Tenchi
had burst into the lab yelling at her, as though it was somehow her fault
Mihoshi had activated a "Rainbow Bright Rainmaker Missile." He was
Isn't that supposed to be Rainbow Brite ? ^_^
"I'm here for the lab assistant job."
Washuu and Mihoshi turned to see who the newcomer was. There was no one
there.
"I'm down here." Washuu turned her gaze downward and saw a lanky white rat
walking on his hind legs, a suitcase in hand.
Hey, I think I recognize this guy !
"There must be some mistake. I wanted a lab assistant, not a lab rat." A
smile spread across Washuu's lips. "Still you shouldn't have come all this
way for nothing. Want to try some of my super anabolic steroid/amphetamine
pills?"
The rat held up his hands. "No thanks. I just ate. And I should tell you I
really am here for the lab assistant job. This is the right place, isn't
it?"
Mihoshi started jumping up and down in joy. "I'm going to get the job. I'm
going to be Washuu's lab assistant."
Washuu placed her hand to her chin in thought as she looked at the rat.
"You have any prior experience?"
The rat nodded, "I used to work with a brilliant genius who wanted to rule
the world, but we had a falling out. When I saw your ad I said to myself,
'Boy I'd love to work with the Universe's Most Brilliant Scientist.' So
here I am."
Mihoshi giggled vacantly and turned to the rat. "There's no way she'll
pick you."
Washuu looked back and forth between the two. She started to consider
which one to choose, then she realized it was no choice at all. She walked
up to Mihoshi and placed her hands on the officer's shoulders. A smile
brightened upon Mihoshi's lips.
"Get the hell out. I'm picking the rat."
Mihoshi's was crushed. She ran out of the lab crying. Washuu gave a little
dance of joy of her own, then went to a nearby bottle of champagne and
popped it open in celebration. She offered some to her new assistant,
which he accepted gracefully.
"So what's your name little one?" Washuu asked as she took a swallow of
champagne.
"They call me Pinky ma'am. Pinky."
Uhm... isn't this the part where the music cues in ? ^_^
Anyway, a nice short fic. BTW, thanks for sending the epilogue 5 ! Another
great chapter. This is going to lead into another series isn't it ?
Anyway, thanks for everything ! BTW, can you help me with my little addiction
for all things Ultraman. Yeah, I know, it's been over fifteen years. I thought I lost
it during the mid '80s but it seems to have come back.
Anyway, thanks again !