"Jeff Rutsch" <jdrutsch@ucdavis.edu> wrote:

   If you liked the story, or have any thoughts, I would really appreciate
a reply.  Thank you,

Okay.... All comments strictly IMO.

Stylistically, this was pretty good. It needs to be gone over and edited
for missing words and other typos, but the writing itself is good and
the plot is interesting.

The problem I had with it is characterization. A lot of what the
characters do (or have done) in this fic, I just can't imagine them
doing, and nothing in the fic convinces me that they would. I can
believe Ranma would run off looking for a cure if he had possible
information leading to one. But why shack up with Ukyo? And why did
Akane switch to Ryoga instead of going looking for Ranma the way she did
when he ran off in the Hiryu Shoten Ha story (volume 13)? And Akane with
a gun? That's... just... wrong.

In summary, it was an interesting story -- but it wasn't the characters
that I know.

Oh, and also, please convert your quote marks to standard ASCII ones.
The directional ones are unreadable by some mailers.