At 04:51 PM 3/31/99 -0800, you wrote:

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A good chapter, one comment though...

Having Akane have so much control over Ranko is becoming a little 
annoying. She could practically have any wish she desired granted 
Ranko's level of ability with controlling her magic. The plot seems ok, 
there is of course the possibility of having the ring taken away from 
Akane, but nothing much has happened in this chapter to make it 
memorable.

Given Akane has this almost unlimited power, why don't you add a limit 
to that power. Having Ranko mess up the wish is good, but add to that a 
serious consequence for each wish that continually builds up either for 
the genie or for the user of the ring. i.e the life of the genie is used 
up, the life of the user is used up, for each good wish, one bad wish is 
done, the ring steals the personality of the genie (making Ranko 
permanent and no Ranma) etc. so that at least the ring has more value 
rather than just being Ranko's home and cause for being a genie.

I have to disagree with you here.  I personally would rather the hints of
the mysterious stanger disappear.  Instead of worrying over who gets the
ring (and control of Ranma) and then how they get outsmarted (which seems
to be the only way to defeat a cleaver evil person with ultimate power) I
would rather see how Akane deals with having the world at her fingertips
(what is the point of anything then?) and Ranma and Akane's relationship
with the control she has.  I think the character interaction has much more
promise than conflict over the ring and Ranma's dealing with slavery to
someone he hates.  Slavery to someone he care about is more interesting to
deal with.

Anyway, I look forward to seeing more of this, however it goes.

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