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A good chapter, one comment though...

Having Akane have so much control over Ranko is becoming a little 
annoying. She could practically have any wish she desired granted 
Ranko's level of ability with controlling her magic. The plot seems ok, 
there is of course the possibility of having the ring taken away from 
Akane, but nothing much has happened in this chapter to make it 
memorable.

Given Akane has this almost unlimited power, why don't you add a limit 
to that power. Having Ranko mess up the wish is good, but add to that a 
serious consequence for each wish that continually builds up either for 
the genie or for the user of the ring. i.e the life of the genie is used 
up, the life of the user is used up, for each good wish, one bad wish is 
done, the ring steals the personality of the genie (making Ranko 
permanent and no Ranma) etc. so that at least the ring has more value 
rather than just being Ranko's home and cause for being a genie.


Anyway, that's just my suggestion. Hope to read more from you soon.


Sincerely, 
~ Kahlil Noriega

Frost fills the sky over Ten Mile lake...
Silken threads anxious of youth...
Looking at the moon and feeling lonely...
Envious of lover's, not of immortality...
Envious of love, not of immortality...
~ Excerpt from the movie, " A Chinese Ghost Story "
  Ranma 1/2: A Chinese Ghost Story

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