From: "Bastet's Chosen" <matthew.lewis@yale.edu>
To: godphoniex@HOTMAIL.COM
CC: ffml@fanfic.com
Subject: Re: [FFML] [Ranma]Ranma-chan: Genie of the Ring Chapter 04
Date: Wed, 31 Mar 1999 22:18:59 -0500

At 04:51 PM 3/31/99 -0800, you wrote:

[Snip fic] 

A good chapter, one comment though...

Having Akane have so much control over Ranko is becoming a little 
annoying. She could practically have any wish she desired granted 
Ranko's level of ability with controlling her magic. The plot seems 

ok, 

there is of course the possibility of having the ring taken away from 
Akane, but nothing much has happened in this chapter to make it 
memorable.

Given Akane has this almost unlimited power, why don't you add a limit 
to that power. Having Ranko mess up the wish is good, but add to that 

a 

serious consequence for each wish that continually builds up either 

for 

the genie or for the user of the ring. i.e the life of the genie is 

used 

up, the life of the user is used up, for each good wish, one bad wish 

is 

done, the ring steals the personality of the genie (making Ranko 
permanent and no Ranma) etc. so that at least the ring has more value 
rather than just being Ranko's home and cause for being a genie.

I have to disagree with you here.  I personally would rather the hints 

of

the mysterious stanger disappear.  Instead of worrying over who gets 

That person in China is gone for a long while.  I'll use him sometime, 
but for right now there is so much more fun to be had with the regular 
cast.   
the

ring (and control of Ranma) and then how they get outsmarted (which 

seems

to be the only way to defeat a cleaver evil person with ultimate power) 

I

would rather see how Akane deals with having the world at her 

fingertips

(what is the point of anything then?) and Ranma and Akane's 

relationship

with the control she has.  I think the character interaction has much 

more

promise than conflict over the ring and Ranma's dealing with slavery to
someone he hates.  Slavery to someone he care about is more interesting 

to

deal with.

Not to mention how the entire situation has changed due to the simple 
fact that Akane is now wearing a ring.

Anyway, I look forward to seeing more of this, however it goes.

Thank you
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