The stranger soon recovered his balance.  "Magget!  How dare you touch

                                                    ^^^^^^

I think the word you want is ^Maggot^

     *Only later did I find out that he was speaking the native tongue of the
Tsuranuanni Empire.*

 ^^^^^^^^^^^

I don't have the books in front of me, but I believe it's simply
^Tsurani^

     *I accidentally struck a globe the Great One, yes that is what people

                                ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

called those black robed individuals over in Kelewan, was holding and created

Incomplete.  Maybe ^globe that the Great One^ or something...


Interesting idea, but why the time differential?  I'm not sure that's
possible in the Riftwar universe unless Ranma time travels at some
point, which he would surely know about.

Also, the switching between Ranma's thoughts simply being thoughts and
Ranma's thoughts being narration is very awkward to me.  It might be
better to have the information that you provide through Ranma's thoughts
(such as the black-robes being called Great Ones) brought out in
discussions between Ranma and other characters.

I hope that Ranma coming home will be used as a framework for telling
his adventures in Midkemia (and assumedly Kelewan).  I've seen too many
authors waste a good set up just to produce a mature, super-powered
Ranma.  

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