On Sat, 27 Mar 1999, jimlazar@earthlink.net wrote:

huffed and glared at the woman who she once called a sister. Now she
didn't know how to think of her birth mother, Ritsuko.

	It certainly *seems* like she knows how to think of her ...

Tears started to flow from her eyes again. "What's wrong with me?"

	<opens mouth, pauses> Rhetorical question, right?

     Shinji had just started to grapple with an enemy Eva drone when he
responded. "I don't know, she's always seemed to know all the secrets of
this game." He thrust upwards with his progressive knife and gutted his
enemy, causing the multicolored guts to ooze out onto the ground.

	Well, technically he does know now.  She told him, I think.

     "Pisse-kopf! How dare you pass your piss off as mine!" Asuka
snapped, and stomped off down the street. She was so angry, that she had
forgotten that she had wanted to get together with Shinji alone to
discuss their missed date.

was so angry that she forgot

     A loud bang was heard as the hotel room door was kicked open and a
short woman with short black hair stormed in. "Kaji, you god-dammed
mother-fucker!"

	Maya's hair is brown, the last time I checked.

     Ritsuko smiled and placed a hand on Maya's shoulder. "Thanks, Maya.
You're always there when I need you."

	<deeeeep sigh> I *know* what's coming.

	Maya Deserves Better Dammit!

     "Okay... okay! I understand already," Asuka snapped. She really
should learn not to talk to Rei anymore, but it's not like she has many
choices to choose from since Third Impact. <Well, I guess Rei's better

Tense mess up.

She really should have learned not to talk to Rei anymore, but it wasn't
like she had many options to choose from since Third impact.

     Rei grew angry again. "Shut up! You sound just like a scratched
DVD! I'll marry him... with or without your permission!"

     "You can't he's... your half-brother," Ritsuko said.

	Okay, who *didn't* see this one coming?

     Rei shook her head. "I know I'm technically a clone, but not of
your mother."

     "Huh? But..."

     "I was created during Second Impact. If anyone could be called my
mother, it would be Misato."

	This ... this, on the other hand, is a truly f---ed up development.

	Good work.  Looking forward to more.

Chris Davies.