On Thu, 25 Mar 1999, J Chu wrote:

*Ruuuuuuumbbbbbbbllllllleeeeeeeee....*

Tsuyoshi vibrated like a jackhammer on steroids.

 "Wwwhhhaaattt'sss ttthhhaaattt?"

The fifty blury images of Sana that floated in front of Tsuyoshi
responded,  "IIIIIIttttttt'sssssss mmmmmyyyyy
Bbbbbbbaaaaaaaaaarrrrrrrruuuuuuuuucccccchhhhhhhaaaaaa!    Iiiiii
ttttttthhhhhhiiinnnkkk  Rrrreeeiii iiisss cccaallliiinnnggg uuusss!"

	Waiwai! The buruccha! :D
	Good metaphor and also the description of what Tsuyoshi sees....

*Woosh*

Tsuyoshi blinked as his hair, the trees, parking meters, pedestrians and
cars in the vincinity swayed in the sudden vacuum left by the overly
energetic girl.  He pushed his glasses back up and squinted at the
rapidly disappearing dot in the distance!

	Hm, get rid of the exclamation point there. They're not usually
used in the narrative parts of prose.

After a few silent moments, he finally regained enough presence of mind
to shout, "Wha...  Hey!  Sana!  Wait up!"

Instantly, Sana was directly beside him.  She grabbed Tsuyoshi's school
bag with an iron grip. She then proceeded to drag the poor boy at a
breakneck pace down the road, leaving a large trail of dust behind.

"Come on Tsuyoshi!  We gotta go!  Go! Go! Go!  Yeah!  Go Sana!  Yay me!
Go Sana go!"

Sana put away the little Babbit Pom Poms as Tosuyuki attempted to get
his breath back.

	Heh. Good dialogue and description of Sana there, although 'Yay
me!' doesn't seem to be quite like her. 'Go Sana go!' fits fine, however.

[more snipping, since the above chunk is the only coherent chunk of the
fic (I sort of threw continuity out of the window for a sec and just
wrote what came to mind for much of the fic... I feel that the rest
really needs tweaking...  I might have more courage tomorrow to release
more...)

	Go for it! This will likely be the first real Kodocha fic ever
out. I look forward to it. :)

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