The pins and medals that marked his stature as one
of the elite had been the hardest to leave behind,
markers of a man who had believed, with all his
heart in the cause.

This sentence is a little awkward, and I'm not sure that "stature" is
the right word to use here.

"Yeah hoo!" Daniel screamed as the G's pressed
him back in his seat.

"gees", I think, works better.

"Lets go!" Dan yelled as he got out of his seat.

Let's

That's it?  You've barely got a beginning here.  So far we have "Dan
and Sakura go on a date".

The prologue was well done, showing some very good descriptive
imagery.  Dan and Sakura seem like okay people, if a bit too perfect -
it would be nice if you could add some "humanizing" foibles.

But the story itself has a *long* way to go.  I'd like to see a bigger
chunk of this next time.  This really isn't enough to sink my teeth
into.

I'm a big Robotech fan, so I'll be looking for more of this.  :)

-Richard