On Mon, 22 Mar 1999, the DragonBard wrote:

               Knights of Moonlight and Dreams

     Just so you know, I'm using the japanese names for the characters, 
and the american names for the attacks, as most of them sound better, at 
least to me.  Not to mention I can't remember the Japanese names.

There's pretty easy ways to find them, like Doi's SM pages:
http://www.tcp.com/~doi/smoon

     It was business as usual for the weekly Sailor Scout meeting.  
Usagi and Rei were arguing over the manga, as the other Inner Scouts 
looked on in embarresment.  Except for Ami, who was busy with something 

over a manga

embarrassment

     "Is there something the matter Ami?"  Luna asked.      "No Luna, 

matter, Ami?

     "So Ami, how did your visit with your cousin go?"  Makoto asked.  
The other scouts, except for Rei and Usagi, turned excitedly to listen.  

Well, that leaves just Minako as the 'other scouts' then :)

     "Come on, attack me."  She said.  Ami blinked.  <Wasn't Akane going 
to train me?>  She wondered.

I don't think Ranma would invite a woman he doesn't know to attack him.

He at least claims he doesn't fight girls.
Once you accept that premise, this scene works fairly well, but Ranma
generally doesn't take part in training other people.

Ranma wasn't there.  She tried again, but it was like trying to touch a 
rainbow, he was always in a different place then he had been.

I like that metaphor.  However, it's Ranko who wasn't there, and 'she was
always'

     "Since she's your cousin, why don't you show her some of the basics 
of the Tendo style, since I don't think she's quite ready for the aeriel 
combat of Saotome style."

Actually, given the leaping skills she demonstrates in the Mercury vs.
Endymion episode of the first season, I think she would be suited for the
aerial combat style.  While Mercury is no trained fighter, she is quite
nimble and can jump quite well.

     "Ok."  Akane went into a set of simple stances, while Ranko gave 
comments on what was wrong with her form, and ways to improve it.  Ami 
heard a load thump from behind her.  She turned her attention there, and 

loud thump

brace herself for the blow, and the likely repricusions of being hit.  

repurcussions

She was surprised when all she felt was a gentle push.  She opened her 
eyes, only to find that the little monster was feeling her up, and 
rubbing it's face in the space between her breasts.

Hehe :)

     Akane screamed at it.  "You pervert!  Leave my cousin alone!"  She 
slammed a fist into the creatures skull, sending it to the floor.  It 
looked up at her with puppy dog eyes.

creature's skull

     "But what about the monster?  Didn't you go after it?"  Rei asked.  
None of them had been able to get to the Tendo Dojo before Ami had given 
the AllCLEAR signal on the communicater.

did you mean to jam these together?

     "What about that energy blast you say Ranko fired?  Are you sure 
it's like my Venus Crescent Beam?  How can he do that?"  Minako asked.  

How can she

     "From the tests that I have run on our powers, and some research, 
I've concluded that our powers draw on certain energies, which are 
remarkable similar to those that the Negaverse steal, which from Rei's 
description, is the same as ki.  Especially your attacks, Mina-chan, 
because they seem to be ki in a raw, but focused state.  Bascially the 

How is something raw, but focused?  How would this be different from
'processed'?


Some interesting ideas here, not a whole lot to comment on yet.  The idea
of a chi-based technology is cool, though the difference between that and
magic is rather fuzzy to me :)

Everyone seems reasonably in character, except that I think Ranma probably
should be a little more...Hmm, hard to say, but he doesn't typically train
people; I'm not sure how good he would really be at it.  Nor does he
normally willingly fight women.



John Walter Biles :  MA-History, Ph.D Wannabe at U. Kansas         
ranma@falcon.cc.ukans.edu       
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rhea@maison-otaku.net      http://www.maison-otaku.net/~rhea/

Bailesu:  But the plot had so many holes, I could fly the Yamato through
it.