On Sat, 20 Mar 1999 Starrngr@aol.com wrote:

It must be just me, because I truely didnt see a transition from the
cannonical Venus to the Venus we see in this scene.  It seemed to me that all
of the sudden we had Venus acting like Athena.  I can buy the senshi growing

Do you mean sneaking her boyfriend into her room, or when she went on the
rampage?  The chaos spirit was rather responsible for the rampage, and the
sneaking boyfriend into the room...well, I've been snuck past a dorm
mother by a girl who was a fundamentalist :) 

up in that regard, but I still dont see this.  And I especially dont see Venus
acting like this in public.  Then again, I didnt notice when you introduced
those two from Kimigure Orange road in previous chapters either... Since
discussions here makes it plain that the two of them have spent time with the
other two.

Chapter 5, if I remember correctly.

Speaking of time, the Zodiac has been strangely silent of late.  We still run
into Gemini -P, but I was of the opinion that by now enough time had passed
that Gemini was no longer accendant.  Other than that, this scene played well.

Cancer is ascendant, and she is taking a more cuatious approach.

The conversation about the bow.  Way to much time is mentioned in this
conversation.  In fact, the only amount of time that the Bow really should
have been in Elven hands is during the time between the fall of the SiM and
now.  Prior to that, there would ususally be a serving Sailor Venus who had
posession of the Bow, would there not?

Yes, but the Silver Millenium fell 25,000 years ago.  They've had it a
looong time.
 

The shower scene:  I thought Clark's last name was Kent.  Who is this Magusen
person?  And if he's a teacher, I dont really think they would be bold enough

Nope.  He's never been Clark Kent, and he's not superman.

The Attorney scene:  1) If Clark's last name is Maguson, why would he be the
brunt of superman jokes?  It only works if his last name is Kent, which I
thought it was.  It also screams to me that we now know who the white knight
is. 

What superman jokes?
 

Hectate Vs Luna Rnd 2:  How does Hectate know that this is a school for
commoners?  2, How is it that she can possibly expect Luna to dictate to
someone?  She is an advisor, not Usagi's parent.  3)  Hectate should be well
aware of the fact that since the fall of the SiM most people no longer know
about Venusian cats and their ability to speak.  Since Usagi is a minor, how

Hecate is quite not in touch with Earth reality.

could Luna POSSIBLY dictate what school Usagi goes to since that choice is
made by her PARENTS, not Luna?

Because Hecate is a Queen. She's used to command, which makes her pushy.

The whole Makoto / Clark thing seems a bit unrealistic.  Makoto was always
known as boy crazy....  yet all through this chapter she tries to deny that
she thinks someone is cute.  This also does not parse true, especially
considering what happens after Clark rescues her.

This is itself, a plot point :)
 

Item last:  I would consider turning Minako into an Elf to be a very bad
thing.  Clearly, the elves are a separate race, and the line of Senshi are
human.  Once Minako is no longer human, she should no longer be Senshi.
Granted, you could bring out later that she is more of an Honorary elf, but
that is no reason to stick elf ears on her, other than its just plain funny.

Elves are one of the races of Man, as the story points out :)

John Walter Biles :  MA-History, Ph.D Wannabe at U. Kansas         
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Bailesu:  But the plot had so many holes, I could fly the Yamato through
it.