Gary Kleppe wrote:

I'm willing to entertain changes, but I need to hear concrete,
constructive suggestions as to how to do so.

Gary Kleppe
http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics

        Gary, the simplest solutions are often the best.  My suggestion? Don't
change a thing in the story, but Add a Question mark to the title.  "Justice?"
        Works for me.  Not that I had a problem with it before now, that is.
:D

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Sincerely....
Shimitsu Kaoru.
Lost "Dragon-Boy"
of Shimitsu-Ryuu.
Prince of Chaos.
"What makes a curse is simply the view, a blessing to some is a curse unto you,
But acceptance can conquer that fear you hold high, through acceptance comes
peace..... are you willing to try?"
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