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On Mon, 15 Mar 1999, KaraOhki wrote:

"You can't be with me every second, love."

                                     ^^^^

You might want to capitalize ^love^ in this sentence, as it seems to be
used as a proper noun.

Akane took a couple of breaths, trying to remain calm.  She couldn't
believe that someone was accusing Ranma of beating her.

Yeah!  That's supposed to be the other way around... oh, wait.  This
isn't The Bitter End, is it?  :)

Akane lifted her face from Ranma's chest, and kissed him.

"Thank you, love."

             ^^^^

If it was ^my love^, you wouldn't need to capitalize, but ^love^ by
itself is a proper noun, I believe.  If someone else could confirm or
refute this, I would be much obliged.  (For my own future reference, as
well.)

As she spoke, Kasumi gave Akane a look that caused her to pick up her
chopsticks and begin eating her breakfast.    Soun allowed Kasumi to

                                           ^^^^

A couple of extra spaces.  Yes, I'm a nitpicker.  :)

I can't comment much about the story since I haven't read many of the
previous chapters yet, but it looks good.  The resolution isn't occurring
all at once (Shampoo seems to be OK, but Ukyo still has problems) which
has been the trouble of a number of other post-manga 'fics that I've
read.

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