*faint* 

*shiver*

Ugh! I admit it was a sick idea, and it was very dark, but the way you 
wrote it had me reading to the very end. I usually don't read dark fics, 
much less ones that don't center around Ranma, but I felt pity for 
Ryuuji at the very beginning and wanted to know what happens to him at 
the end. Katsura was a nice edition to the plot, and I pity the guy even 
more knowing that she could have made his life better, but alas this was 
a _really_ dark fic.

Half the time when I was reading this, part of me wanted to delete this, 
the idea was just too sick, and at the beginning I found little evidence 
of the involvement of the Ranma cast, that was when Nabiki came up, then 
I simply had to finish it to know. Oh yeah, you never did mention who 
the father was, though not really important i just wanted to know who 
Nabiki ended up with. 

The ending wasn't too dark as I thought it would be (or a surprise), 
partway when I was reading this, I kinda knew both of them had to die.

Overall, it was a good read, and I hope to read more from you soon.
Anyway, I hope you found some thing useful in this C&C, I'm not that 
good with grammar and stuff. 


Sincerely,
~ Kahlil N.

Frost fills the sky over Ten Mile lake...
Silken threads anxious of youth...
Looking at the moon and feeling lonely...
Envious of lover's, not of immortality...
Envious of love, not of immortality...

Excerpt from the movie " A Chinese Ghost Story "
Ranma 1/2: A Chinese Ghost Story

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