On Tue, 9 Feb 1999, Rod M wrote:

        "Rei," said May, with that somewhat motherly smile
on her lips.  "There's nothing wrong with you." 

	Suggest "*a* somewhat motherly smile".  You have not referred to any
somewhat motherly smile heretofore.

        Rei looked at her doubtfully, but let her continue. 

        "I think, Rei, that you've got a crush on young Mr. 
Ikari." 

        Rei looked at Maya, more puzzled than before.  "A
crush?" she asked. 

        Maya nodded happily.  "You just might be in love." 

	Suggest "feeling attracted to him."

        "Just kidding!  Just kidding!"  Kensuke laughed,
arms up in mock surrender.  "Hey Shinji, what'cha doing
after school today?  They've got Gekiganger X down at the
movie theatre today." 

	<glare>

Fuyutsuki looked down at the head.  "Hard to believe that
even primitives worshiped this ludicrous thing."

	... y'know, I really hope the two of you aren't going to start
imitating the less likeable elements of H.P. Lovecraft's personality.  You
can maybe cut the "primitive" references in half and not lose a lot.

Chris Davies.
(Considering that Lovecraft would have been mildly nauseated that anyone
would suggest that the Japanese, of all people, would be involved in
fighting the Great Old Ones, I mean ...)