Greetings, I've done a little modification on chapter six since
the last time it was posted.  And since it's been a while I'll repost
the whole story as well.  Not much different on 1-5 though.

This is overall good, but you have a LOT of typos and grammar errors to
wring out.  Take the first sentence:

Ranma shoot awake and rose to a seated posture, coughing and

"shoot"?

"Well, you are good."  Shampoo's opponent commented, pulling a black
rose from her schoolbag.  "I'm Kodachi, the black rose,"  She said as

It's not too important, but you might want capitalize the second "black
rose", since it's a title.

said as she turned and looked her in the eye.  "I see many hours of
practice ahead of you.  Long hours."

LOL

A figure stood deep in the shadows filling the Saotome yard.
Looking up at the house, singling out one particular window.

...

a feminine figure flying across the sky.  Mousse immediately turned in
pursuit with a cry of "Shampoo!"

This scene really isn't clear.

maneuvers!*  She thought excitedly.  *He's always been hesitant about
sharing what he and Ranma learned about Construction Martial arts, but

How about "Saotome Anything-Goes School of Martial Arts Battle Damage
Repair"?

arms.  His glasses over his eyes he was looking into her face.  "I

You have quite a few sentence fragments that look like they're missing
punctuation or a verb.

Noriko smiled benevolently.  "I don't know you so I can't tell
weather or not your right for Mousse.  I do know that you could well be

"weather"?  A spell-checker won't errors involving words that sound the
same.

...

Sorry if I sound too critical.  It's a great story:  well-written, literal,
in-character, and (best of all) entertaining!  It'd be a shame if some
people got turned off by poor proofreading.

Then again, that's what FFML's for, ne? ^_^

-- Craig Putnam
Sailor Singularity