| Subject: Re: [ffml][author's frist fanfic][sm/zelda] Usagi no Densetsu! Mamoru e Kako, Prologue |
| From: David Johnston |
| Date: 2/4/1999, 2:12 AM |
| To: DRGDevil@aol.com |
| CC: ffml@fanfic.com |
Hasn't grabbed me so far. Frankly, it doesn't make a lot of sense. I think you need to slow down a little, and give some exposition.