<< My friend, this fic sucked for several reasons:
 
True, maily because I'm a beginner at fanfics...somewhat.


 <<1; Parasite Eve was a game made _only_ to test a new engine for
 future rpgs.  It was not given a true plot, or even a decent length,
 despite the praise it recieves in reviews.  It is not suitable for a
 cross-over of any sort.
 	
True, but the people at the AOL boards, i.e. ANTAGONIST (which is the biggest
gaming channel this side of the net).  They had a Parasite Eve fanfiction
contest...and apparantly I too objected to this "crapy" game.  But I had to
make ends meet.

2; The format was horrible.  The sentences were rambling and

 fragmented, you put commas in the wrong spots, etc.  Go over the bitch
 with a fine tooth comb _before_ you submit it.

What?  It's not like it's a contest or anything...just wanted some comments,
and obviously I got the flames. 

3; You crossed the two ideas in all the wrong ways.  Pokemon get

 their powers from mitochandria as much as Ranma does.  I.E. _NONE_.

If you read what I wrote, then you wouldn't mention this.
 	
 >There are other things I could point out, but I haven't the time,
 nor the wont.  Here's a suggestion;  Go over it, fix up the errors, fix
 your plot holes, explain when and where Ash found Mew II, etc.
 
I don't need to explain where Ash found MewTwo.  I'm assuming that the general
audience played and beat the game, or watched the anime, thus that is why I
started off with, "Two weeks after Ash beat the Elite Four.."

It will never recieve the best of attention, but it would be a

 much smoother read. 

True, but I'm not here to be famous or anything...but my new creation probably
might work out better than this "4 month old" fic.