"Ryouko ... what have you done?" he exclaimed.  "The
field... its all a mess!"

Hmm, this "its" DOES need an apostrophe.

    Tenchi opened and closed his mouth a few times before
sighing.  "All right, lets get back to the house, I'll deal
with this later."

Apostrophe in "lets".

    Unfortunately, simply waiting around had begun to get
very boring.  She'd exhausted her supply of buttered popcorn
as well as her preferred drinking solution a long time ago
and had been forced to gnaw on a piece of chewing gum for
the last forty-five minutes.  That, as well, was beginning
to lose it's taste and become bland, despite the

No apostrophe in this "its".

    "Umm... well..." Mihoshi wracked her brain.

racked

    "What'cha doing?" Mihoshi asked.  Washuu grit her teeth
and turned slowly back around to face Mihoshi.

gritted

    "Uughhh," Washuu moaned, feeling very woozy.  She sat
up suddenly, throwing a cloud of black dust all over her
lab.

    Strike that, what used to be her lab.

    Anything that wasn't firmly bolted into subspace had
been thrown across the room and shattered.  Displays had
exploded outward, machinery had been charred black by heat,
and Washuu and Mihoshi were covered in dust, sitting in the
middle of it all.

    Washuu looked over to the computer which was displaying
the energy entities.  It was wrecked, although it hadn't
exploded like everything else, the panel had melted into a
pool of gray, and the monitor, while still intact, had the
last image burned into the screen.  Washuu looked over the
ghostly image and tried to figure out what had happened.

                            ***

    "Aaakk!" Washuu screamed, clutching her ears as the
computer's processes sped up to a furious rate, emitting a
high pitched noise.  She looked over to the tubes as they
glowed a dark shade of green.

    "Miss Washuu! What's wrong?!" Mihoshi screamed over the
noise.

    The green glow began to coalesce into the shapes of
people.  Two in one tube, two in the other.  They were only
vague shapes, without enough detail to make out a face or
gender (assuming they had gender).

    Washuu turned back to the console to see Mihoshi
standing over it with an inquisitive look.  A formula for
disaster if Washuu ever saw one.

    "MIHOSHI!" yelled Washuu.  "Don't.  Touch.  Anything."

    "Whaaa?" Mihoshi responded as her hand rested on the
console, simultaneously pressing several buttons at once.

    That's when the tubes exploded.

These two scenes appear to be out of sequence.  Okay, the second one
is a flashback from the first, but that's not very obvious.  The
arrangement seems clumsy, anyway; it might be best to shift the
second one earlier in the story, and let it all happen in simple
sequence.

    "Hmm, it's going to need a redesigning."  Washuu put
her hand to her chin and looked down in contemplation.

Either "need redesigning" or "need a redesign".

    "What isn't she telling us?" Aeka wondered aloud,
holding onto Mihoshi.

More than you can possibly imagine.  :)

                      -End Chapter 3-

Authors Notes:

    Ugh. I didn't like this chapter, I don't know why, but
I just had the worst time writing it.  Oh well, at least
it's done.  Onto Chapter 4, which features the return of the
main characters and the beginning of the actual reason I
wrote up these first three setup chapters.

It seems mostly okay from this end, if a little short.  But then, the
Tenchi side of things doesn't really need too much setup, so that's
not much of a problem.

Looking forward to the beginning of the "real story"...

Cheers,
Angus

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