Ranam = Fanfiction

Okay this is my first fanficand first posting on ffml  I mean really it
is, if you don't
believe me then don't but it is.

     This is a very,VERYYYYY rough draft.  I just finished it about an
hour ago. I
have not read through it completely and have only spell checked it so
there are a lot
of grammer fixing. I want C&C on what you like and dislike about the
story, whether
characters, dialogue, thoughts, action, whatever just give it  to me.



RanmaRanko




Far away yet very close


In Furinken high, in the hall we see Ranma holding two bucket looking
down

     He alone, very lonely I wish I could show myself but I cant. My
name is Ranko, the spirit of Ranma curse form. No Im not the demon,
that was someone else and I not a curse anyway, funny Ranma never called
me a curse anymore when he turn to a girl. Im standing by his side but
he cant see me.
    I move to him and stand beside him. I remember all those day when
Ranma first arrive and boy did he have his life turn upside down, ever
since he step on Nerima soil he been beated, hurt, sky rocker into the
air. I have to heal him ever time he go flying, that why he heal every
fast, thank to me. Their this one time where he fell and hit his head,
by Akane of coures for some misunderstanding, he fell and hit his head
and was dieing, I was scare out of my spirit skin the only way to save
him was to take over his body and let the body heal or it die and so
will Ranma.I was happy to live again but I know it was only for awhile
befor he to heal, I tell myself he going to be alright.
     Every night I would lay by his side and watch him sleep, I was
happy even if he cant see me, I just want to be close to someone I care
about.
    In Furiken high, in the hall we see Ranma holding two bucket looking
down.
 She here, beside me,
Ranma look at the window.
     Even if I cant see her I could feel her present I wonder what she
doing, is she looking at me, I dont know but it feel nice to have
someone. I was always alone, yeah people would said why would I be alone
when I have so many people that know me, yeah right attacking me is a
friend, force marrying me is a friend and malleting me is a friend but
somehow I dont have to be alone because there someone that will always
be by my side and even now when no one would believe me I know she
would. I first notice her when Akane finally lost it, I hit the ground,
head first, I  could feel myself slipping away, but somehow I ending in
a empty space with some tree I discover I was inside my head, there I
notice her then a flash, I became mad that someone was going to take
over my body but I soon discover that she wasnt, I guess I needed that
recovery or who know what would have happen.
     When I asleep everynight I could feel her present, I dont have to
see her to know she here. If I listen carefully I could heard her soft
voice talking or singing to me.
     Is it so wrong to care for somebody who is so far away yet so
close.
 Maybe someday We will meet.

End


Will that it.
I know it not the kind of story you people read, but sent comment. The
truth I want real answer.

RanmaRanko^_^