Hiya,

Interesting read.  It could almost go for a short-fic as it's funny
right where it ends but then again, I'd like to read more.  Not
that I want to take it up myself...  I've yet to finish any story
I've begun, unfortunately.

A couple comments.

    A cable car passed in front of her and then, just as the cable car
cleared her, a giant panda landed a savage kick to the girl's stomach.
The girl was knocked backward into some food crates.

I'm thinking ... knocked back into some food crates.
The other works, but *shrug*

She turned and walked away, dragging her large backpack behind her.0

What's with the O at the end?

    "Well, why on Earth did you have to register me as a girl for?"
Ranko asked, scratching under her left breast.

And why did we have to come to America?  You seem to like having
Ranko scratch her butt/breast...  is there some reason for this other
than the fact that it's not something a 'women would do in public'?

    "Well, Andrea, sometimes a nice place you can call home can be
better," Ranko said, whistfully.

    "You can call me Andi."

I know an Andrea who's nickname is Andi...  Just how common is that
nick I wonder.

    Ranko consulted her schedule. "Err...,Professor Donaldson,
Wednesdays at ten."

Needs a space before Professor

    The man stirred. He opened his eyes and looked around he saw
Andrea. "Andi... um could you untie me?" he asked, calmly.

    "Ya... right. What were you doing in my bathroom?" Andrea asked.

She doesn't ask why he knows to call her Andi, or even how he knows
her name at all for that matter?


That's all for now,
Til next transmition:

Warr

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