Hello there,

Interesting story so far.  I'm still not sure who the two people are
but I'm sure that is intentional.  The purpose of the monlith, if there
is one, will be explained later, hopefully?

Now, some comments.  Hope they aren't too confuzlpated.

       Looking around, she was nowhere. Some beach, somewhere, no
place she recognized, seemingly sitting on the edge of forever,
the limitless expanse of blue before her.

And off to her left was a large rock arch with a... movie screen in
empty space?  The screen was flashing pictures at too fast a pace
to follow.

I'm guessing this is Ranma-chan.

Water... She desperately needed water.

More than you think, sister.

A young man.

So, an uncursed male or someone cursed to turn male?  He was wet,
was he not?

You're avoiding descriptive language so we have to guess who is
who aren't ya.

       "Here, you've got a cut on your arm." She kneeled behind him
as he was eating a fruit with red skin and sweet meat.

Are they sticking to fruit they remember is safe like banana's and
pears or are they just hoping they don't discover poisonous fruit?

       "Now we've got a plan... Some plan." She snorted and kicked
a rock into the river.

Barefoot?

The guy seems to me, a male Nabiki.  Just the way he thinks and the
words he uses.  They don't really fit any of the other Ranma chara's.
But some of the physical feats are beyond her so that's just random
wonderings.

Ukyo. Yes." It sounded good in his ears, now that
he said it. "A fine name for a man."

Hmm.  Now I have a doubt.  The girl may be either Akane or Ranma-chan,
but the guy ain't Ukyou.  Ranma-kun, Kunou<the use of bigger words would
fit here but not the memories> or ?.

       It was easy to tell the stone's original tone had been very
dark, but sitting in the sun, day after day, even it couldn't
resist and had lightened under the constant rays.

If someone throws a bone at the monolith and then humans begin to evlove
again, I'm gonna throw a fit.  ;)

If Ukyo hadn't been a
light sleeper, they possibly both would have been dead before they
could have further considered their chances of rescue.

Can't be Ranma...  or is his deep-sleep a fanfic convention?

       Smiling grimly, she glared out at the surrounding jungle.
>From several places, a pair of red dots glared back.

Got a > before From.

       Akane jumped up and managed to pull a coconut off the tree.
She squeezed it in both her hands, snapping the bristly outer
shell and revealing the smooth inner shell.

I remember my father tried to open a coconut once...without a machete.
Hammer, pen-knife, dropping it off the fifth floor.  He didn't have
much success.  Funny to watch though.

       He turned slowly and the blush kicked back into full force
when he saw her treading water, the tops of her breasts just
visible. "Come on in. It's great!" she said, splashing some water
in his direction.

"Argh!"
"What!?"
"Something...something just...swam up my pants."  ;)

By the way, the real Akane can't swim.  And I don't think losing
your memories would help cover one swim even if they forgot that
fact.  I mean, it's not like one can fly if they forget to fall
down....



Eagerly awaiting for the next part!

Warr

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