Catinlife1@aol.com wrote:
This story started when i began thinking, what would it be like if Ranma and
Akane met on regular terms? The story i came up with has some twists to it,
that keep with the original story, but change because of small diffrences in
main charictors personalitys! enjoy, and sorry about my spelling!
If you're REALLY sorry about it, how about using a spell-check program,
or getting someone to edit it before release?
Ranma 1/2 is the creation and property of Rimiko Takahashi, not me!! I did not
No, they're the creation of RUMIKO Takahashi.
create the characters credited to her name, nor do I claim to!
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Prologue:
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A man lies in a bed, sick and pale. The docter said it was emphysema, and
doctor
that he should cut down on his smoking, he never was one to listen to doctors.
smoking. He
The knowladge
knowledge
that one's death is near dose strange things to a man. Some,
does
they want name there heirs, and make sure there money goes to the right
Sometimes, they want to name their heirs, and make sure their money
people. Some want to organize there clutter so that loved ones wont have to
their
when they are gone, but this particular man wanted his daughters betrothed!
"Yes doctor, I'm fine, and no I haven't been smoking. I was calling in
"Yes, Doctor,
regarding your son Tofu. Yes, I've noticed he and my dear Kasumi are getting
along wonderfuly. I was thinking, that maybe, when they reach a sertin age
certain
they could marry. Yes I know there is a small age difference, but there is no
one I would rather have as Kasumi's father-in-law then you, Ono-san! Alright,
you think about it, but give me an answer soon, I'm not getting any healther!"
"Flatery dear?" The sick man's pregnant wife came into the room.
"Flattery,
"Well, Ono is a sucker for flatery." Soun said.
"Genma is here, would you like to see him?"
here. Would
"Yes, yes, of course." Soun said.
A man of medium hight, a balding head, and large girth came into the room.
"Ah, Saotome, my friend, you have come at last!"
"Yes, Tendo, now what was so urgent that you needed to see me?"
"I would like to prupose a marrage." Soun said.
marriage, Soun
"Tendo, we are both married, and your really not my type."
you're
"Not us you moron!
us, you
Your son and my daughter." Soun yelled, and promptly
daughter,"
beagan to cough violently.
began
"You really should stop smoking Tendo." Genma said
smoking, Tendo,"
as he pulled a cigarett
cigarrette
out of Soun's mouth, and placed it in his.
"I will smoke untill the day they lie me in my cascit!"
casket!"
Soun said shourtly.
shortly.
"Excuse me, Mr. Tendo." A man opend the door to the room "We've finished the
opened, and put a period after room.
cascit you ordered, would you like to lie in it to see that you fit in?"
casket you ordered. Would
"Can't you see he's buisy?" Genma asked.
busy?"
"Oh I'm sorry." the man turned to leave, but looked back at Genma. "You know,
Capitalize The
sir, you really shouldn't smoke in the same room as a man with emphysema,
there's a thing called second hand smoke, and it's very dangerus for a man
dangerous
with such weak lungs!" the man then left the room and closed the door quitly
quietly, and capitalize the
behind him.
"So Tendo, what where you saying?" Genma asked.
"I was proposing an aranged
marrage between your son and my daughter." Soun
daughter,"
said.
"But my son isn't even born yet." Genma said.
yet,"
"Nither is my daughter." Soun smiled.
Neither
"Please, Seotome, there is no one I
Saotome
OK, I've run out of patience with this. Before you post again, please
get yourself a spell-check program, or (preferably) a human editor. If
you're not going to make an effort to make this readable, I'm not going
to make an effort to read it.
As for the story, it wasn't very interesting to me. Not only did it
resemble a lot of other fics, but there just wasn't much conflict. Ranma
trying to win Akane from Kuno is a possible conflict, and that's good,
but apart from that there isn't much.
Gary Kleppe
http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics