Hehheh, funny little spamfic; the ending was quite different that what 
I expected (that tells me I should train myself to expect the 
unexpected, but then...). However... 

- Okonymiaki of truth -=20

  I'll bet you're tired of hearing how you spelled 'okonomiyaki' wrong? 

Kodachi slowly crept closer. She made a great effort of=20
avoiding the leaves that where left on the ground.=20
They would crumble noisily under her footsteps,=20
howewer catious she could be. She ducked and stretched=20
out on the ground when she heard Akanes voice yelling=20
about the atroucities that Ranma must have caused.=20
Soon things would go flying out the window so Kodachi=20
inched over to just below it. Now she could hear excactly=20
what was going on inside and it wasn't what she had=20
hoped.

  I'll only say this once (well, you know why), because I think such a 
large and long paragraph could have easily been broken down into several 
shorter paragraphs. 

"But, but, but..." Ranma's efforts where near neigh.=20

  'Neigh?' Also, 'where' should be 'were,' from the looks of it. 

<If he'd only come to grips with reality and leave that=20
horrible slut.> Kodachi looked out at the path she had=20

  'looked out' probably could have been better said with 'looked back' 
or something. 

taken to get to her place. She silently patted her own=20
back. It would have been a wonder if they had seen her.=20
<Now to make one final effort. If Ranma-sama doesn't=20
understand his predicament after this, then he never=20
will> She pulled out an okonymiaki from the bag she=20
bought, made specifically for food. The okonymiaki was=20

  I hope you mean the bag was specifically made for food, 'cuz that 
confused me the first time. 

an excact replica of the ones the crazy girl with the=20
spatula makes, lazed with just the right chemicals for=20

  Replace 'lazed' with 'laced.'

"Aaah, eh he he,  maybe I could do something, urm,=20
more worthy of attention for you?" "No sily. You don't=20
need to excert yourself. Here take this one" "Urm, okay.=20
It looks good. It smells good..." Oh, just eat it"=20

  I have no recollection of Ryoga saying something this blatent to Akane 
before. 

made. "I'M ALIVE? And it tasted great? Akane you can=20
cook!" "Don't act so surprised. I knew it all along"

  I've always thought Ryoga would never say that (I think he's 
maintained that Akane's cooking ALWAYS tasted good, but I suppose that 
would ruin the fic). 

would appreciate some C&C anyway. Especially in=20
regards to how you would compare this to Threads=20
and/or on my writing style. Y'know, I would appreciate=20

  Sorry, can't say that I've read that. 

anything at this moment about Threads, plot ideas that=20
you would like (anything not planned for the characters=20
will in all likelyhood be incorporated), MST's, corrections=20
on spelling mistakes, mail that says I'm a genius/looser for=20
writing such good/crappy work, ANYTHING!

  Yeah, I feel the same way about my (non-oneshot) fics. 

"Ha-ha-ha-ha-ha! Fool! Pain is my friend. Allow me to introduce YOU to 
it!" --Inferno, Beast Wars
"Decepticons FOREVER!!" --Ravage, former Decepticon
"Your persistence is futile! I rise again!" --Rampage
"[Rampage] may be ugly, but he's a PREDACON!" --Quickstrike

--Razorclaw X

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