Donny Cheng wrote:

On Thu, 17 Dec 1998, Razorclaw X wrote:

  Where to start? Beside how utterly-predictable the story was, beside
how, almost word-for-word (sarcastic) it was the same as with the
original Christmas Carol with a few names switched around, beside how
cliche the devices are (then again, EVERYTHING about the original
Christmas Carol was cliche, but then, it was the Mother of the cliche),

I was afraid of that when I started writing this story.  It has been done
countless of times in the past by many other better storytellers.  I have
watched the half dozen different Christmas Carols myself and many of them
twice or more.  I tried to give as much a Nabiki spin as I could, though,
and it looks like I didn't succeed too well.  Some of the dialogue, I've
already been told is not Nabiki-esque, so there will be slight changes in
how she talks.

First thing to remember about Nabiki is that she has a sense of humor,
however malicious.  This is an important difference between her and Scrooge,
who never found anything funny.  

You also might want to rethink the whole Tiny Tim routine which isn't 
especially likely in 1990s Japan.  A more likely tragic consequence of 
Nabiki's behavior is somebody committing suicide.  

beside how much the crossover doesn't seem to work (at least, not for
me; the moment Urd popped up I refused to buy it), beside how utterly

If I had used the ghosts, I felt it would have been even more of a copy
rather than a slightly different twist, which was what I was going for.

one-sided Nabiki was written (I think it's safe to say that we can agree
that she ain't a cold-hearted bastard, dare I say SCROOGE, but that's
the impression I got from this), beside....

True.  Nabiki has a capacity for being very nasty, but I don't think she
could come close to Scrooge.  Another difference in mine to the original.
Scrooge's chance came late in life, I wanted to give Nabiki a chance
earlier on.  Not as effective as the original, but again I waw going for a
different feel.

  In short, this one did nothing for me that the original Chrismas Carol
did. The only question left in my mind after reading this is: "Why?"

Sorry, you didn't like it.  Why?  I wrote it because I love watching any
version of the Christmas Carol during Christmas and I like Ranma 1/2.  I
thought a fusion could work plausibly.  Sorry, you didn't feel the same
way.

"Ha-ha-ha-ha-ha! Fool! Pain is my friend. Allow me to introduce YOU to
it!" --Inferno, Beast Wars
"Decepticons FOREVER!!" --Ravage, former Decepticon
"Your persistence is futile! I rise again!" --Rampage
"[Rampage] may be ugly, but he's a PREDACON!" --Quickstrike

--Razorclaw X

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