On Fri, 18 Dec 1998, Donny Cheng wrote:

On Thu, 17 Dec 1998, Razorclaw X wrote:

  Where to start? Beside how utterly-predictable the story was, beside 
how, almost word-for-word (sarcastic) it was the same as with the 
original Christmas Carol with a few names switched around, beside how 
cliche the devices are (then again, EVERYTHING about the original 
Christmas Carol was cliche, but then, it was the Mother of the cliche), 

Razorclaw, I found it hard to understand this statement, until I realized
your point of view was impaired.  If you remove your head from your ass,
you may find this fic as good as the rest of us did.

I was afraid of that when I started writing this story.  It has been done
countless of times in the past by many other better storytellers.  I have
watched the half dozen different Christmas Carols myself and many of them
twice or more.  I tried to give as much a Nabiki spin as I could, though,
and it looks like I didn't succeed too well.  Some of the dialogue, I've
already been told is not Nabiki-esque, so there will be slight changes in
how she talks.

Worked ok.  Nabiki's dialogue could use a bit of work.

beside how much the crossover doesn't seem to work (at least, not for 
me; the moment Urd popped up I refused to buy it), beside how utterly 

If I had used the ghosts, I felt it would have been even more of a copy
rather than a slightly different twist, which was what I was going for.

He complains that it's too much like the Dicken's tale, then it's not
enough like?  This isn't C&C, this is vomitous spew.

one-sided Nabiki was written (I think it's safe to say that we can agree 
that she ain't a cold-hearted bastard, dare I say SCROOGE, but that's 
the impression I got from this), beside.... 

Since being a cold hearted bastard and seeing the error of your ways is
the entire POINT of the story...

Not that I'd expect you to understand that.

True.  Nabiki has a capacity for being very nasty, but I don't think she
could come close to Scrooge.  Another difference in mine to the original.
Scrooge's chance came late in life, I wanted to give Nabiki a chance
earlier on.  Not as effective as the original, but again I waw going for a
different feel.

Oh my.  You mean... it wasn't like the original?  How... odd.

  In short, this one did nothing for me that the original Chrismas Carol 
did. The only question left in my mind after reading this is: "Why?" 

Sorry, you didn't like it.  Why?  I wrote it because I love watching any
version of the Christmas Carol during Christmas and I like Ranma 1/2.  I
thought a fusion could work plausibly.  Sorry, you didn't feel the same
way.

Sorry you had to suffer through that twit's vileness.  I offer my services
to use my clue-by-four on him.


As for you, Razorclaw, I find you utterly lacking in the christmas spirit
and sentence you to suffer the visitations of ghosts three.

Grow up, moron.

"Ha-ha-ha-ha-ha! Fool! Pain is my friend. Allow me to introduce YOU to 
it!" --Inferno, Beast Wars
"Decepticons FOREVER!!" --Ravage, former Decepticon
"Your persistence is futile! I rise again!" --Rampage
"[Rampage] may be ugly, but he's a PREDACON!" --Quickstrike

--Razorclaw X

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