Good try with your fic, but I think you probably should have held on to 

this

fic until after posting a better fanfic than this one. Or better yet, 

don't

post it at all.
Don't get me wrong, you did good job, but in my opinion, this fanfic 

was a

poor choice as first fanfic to be posted, because first fanfics usually 

gives

the reader the first impression of what to expect from the author later 

on. I

could be wrong, of course.

  If I'd known that when I posted my first fic (which, incidentally, 
wasn't the first fic I WROTE; that came later)....

Besides, this goes directly against the goal of Senshi in the first 

place- if

they cannot defeat their enemies alone without an united front, then 

how can a

single Senshi vicitor expect to defend the whole planet 

single-handedly?

  Here's an idea: are they REALLY doing it to defend the planet, or to 
defend the planet as THEY see it? 

And of course, there's always the future we saw in SMR. There was 

clearly

Mars, Jupiter, Venus, and Mercury in the future- that would contradict 

your

little fanfic, wouldn't it? ^_-

  And let's not forget why everything that happened in that future did: 
because of stupidity on the part of Serenity in building her utopia. 
  (Really vulgar, shameless plug for upcoming Sailor Moon fic....)

"Ha-ha-ha-ha-ha! Fool! Pain is my friend. Allow me to introduce YOU to 
it!" --Inferno, Beast Wars
"Decepticons FOREVER!!" --Ravage, former Decepticon
"Your persistence is futile! I rise again!" --Rampage
"[Rampage] may be ugly, but he's a PREDACON!" --Quickstrike

--Razorclaw X

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