On Wed, 16 Dec 1998, David Johnston wrote:

   She slept until, a fire burned.

No comma after "until".

Yes comma after "until."

I'm not going to say that this prologue is bad, it could be very good.
However, my personal reaction was that it becomes irritatingly opaque
as it goes on.

And I was aware that something like this will happen...for the first time,
I like what I'm working on and a major component of that is the style
which I'm utilizing...I just don't see anything in the fanfic scene
that's written in this style, and I knew that I would recieve at least
one comment staing dislike of the opaquity and vagueness of the structure
and details contained within.  Oh well...

I knew this would turn off some people...it's just a matter of
how many people are turned off.  (Of course, I have no idea about the
number of people on here that would read a Samurai Shodown fic.)

Sklathill