On Thu, 3 Dec 1998, Kevin D. Hammel wrote:

Though she had run home, Akane was not out of breath, merely 
invigorated. She was quite a bit shorter that Kasumi, but wore her black 
hair long much like her sister. "I'm home!" She shouted to those who 
hadn't heard her run up the path. Her gait told any who knew the Art 
that *this* girl was heir to the Tendou school of Anything-Goes martial 
arts. Soun was as proud of Akane as he was Kasumi.

was of Kasumi.

The giant faded from view. "Sailor Saturn has a Henshin Pen which will 
trigger your change. She is looking for you, and will find you soon. I'm 
proud of you, Lady Titan." With that, he faded from view.

Iya.

Nabiki tried to brush sleep from her bleary eyes, awakened by the usual 
sounds of industry downstairs. Kasumi was probably working on breakfast, 
and Akane was probably working out. Nabiki went to perform *her* morning 
duties which consisted mainly of getting cleaned up and dressed for 

duties, which

When Nabiki got home things were back to normal, for the most part. 

got home, things

directed a great river of water and ice at the moon spirit. Akane paused 
for a moment, surprised and pleased with her new technique. It was 
beyond the Art as she knew it, it was Europa's gift to her chosen 

it; it was

"I don't see what any of this has to do with MY honor, besides, I've 
found a girl I really like, and I don't love her or nothin, but who 
knows?"

"Does the honor of the Saotome name mean anything to you?"

"I wonder if it meant anything to pop? It seemed we were always on the 
run from someone."

Heh :)

Ranma realized where Akane was coming from. He (or was it she?) didn't 
think much of them either...

Heh.

the foreheads of the three Tendou girls. He recognized the symbol for 
Jupiter on two of the girls, Akane and Nabiki, while the Kasumi showed a 

Kasumi's forehead showed

Finally Jupiter's ragged crew made it to the battle. Callisto had an 
idea... Raising both her arms and looking at the creature, she shouted 
"Hour of Darkness!" A thick black cloud now surrounded the monster. 
Callisto felt a finger tapping on the back. She turned to see Sailor 
Europa.

Europa gave her teammate a superior look "Uh, that was real bright! Now 
we can't *see* the thing!"

superior look.

Any structural suggestions on improving the flow from episode 1 to 2
to 3 would be greatly appreciated! Episode 2 is more of a side story, 
but has important plot information. Having the narrative switch between 
scenes might be too confusing, however. Any ideas?

Hmm.  I think it flows okay, although it might work better interspersed
with 1, since it overlaps 1 in time.


John Walter Biles :  MA-History, Ph.D Wannabe at U. Kansas         
ranma@falcon.cc.ukans.edu       
rhea@tass.org              http://www.tass.org/~rhea/falcon.html
rhea@maison-otaku.net      http://www.maison-otaku.net/~rhea/

If it has passed from the high and the beautiful to darkness and ruin, that
was of old the fate of Arda Marred; and if any change shall come and the
Marring be amended, Manwe and Varda may know; but they have not revealed it,
and it is not declared in the dooms of Mandos.
--Final Line of The Silmarillion