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Comments and criticisms always welcome.

-Richard

I love it ! You helped me remember part of my childhood, when I first 
watched this anime. Go lion's has and always will be one of my 
favorites. 

I can't say much on the grammar part, I'm not that good with it. ^_^ 

The beginning part of the fic wasn't very clear, no character 
descriptions to point out what series this fic was based on. Only after 
I got to the middle did it make sense. I almost gave up reading it, I'm 
glad I didn't. ^_^

Maybe you could point out which series this is based on, at the 
beginning of  the fic.   The plot of the story looks good, will Allura 
and Keith be finally together?

Anyway, I really like the story. And I'm looking forward to seeing more 
of this.

Sincerely,
~ Kahlil N.

" Frost fills the sky over Ten Mile Lake,
  Silken threads anxious of youth....
  Looking at the moon and feeling lonely...
  Envious of lovers, not of immortality.
  Envious of love, not of immortality. " 

        - Excerpt from the movie " A Chinese Ghost Story "

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http://www.geocities.com/tokyo/temple/9371

E-Mail:
becknkal@addax.bc.ca



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