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                                A Different Viewpoint pt 38

    With the school year over, Ranma, Akane and Johnathon immediately
prepared to leave for Ryogensawa, not even
waiting to find out how their final exams had gone.  They set out that
very afternoon, intending to return in three days.

And we know how well plans work in Ranma 1/2.

    Nabiki seriously debated talking to Dr. Tofu about her plan, but put
it off.  <Shampoo's not fully recovered... I'll 

Don't think you really need the ellipse there. Just a period.

wait until
Ranma returns.>

    The small group took the train to Ryogensawa, and hiked into the
forest from the station.  When they had gotten far
enough into the woods that they wouldn't be seen by people, Johnathon
poured cold water from his canteen over his head.
He explained as they walked.

    Johnathon spoke quietly as they went further into the woods.  "Since
there's so many giant animals around here, I figured I
could use my cat form to our advantage.  My senses are a lot better as a
cat.  I can help us to avoid the animals."  Akane 

I'd put a paragraph break after 'Akane'.

on all sides with much larger trees, blocked their
line of sight.  "Lets

Let's

hide quickly."

quickly,"

 Johnathon suggested.

    Ranma nodded and started leading them toward a different stand of
trees, larger, and not quite as close together, off to the
left.  In his haste he failed to notice a trap.  The ground collapsed
under him and Ranma was barely able to leap away.  A
huge deadfall crashed down on top of the new pit, barely missing him and
Akane, who had been close on Ranma's heels.
Ranma landed half a dozen feet away and spun to see if Akane was
alright.  She was sitting down, having fallen backwards
to avoid the tree trunk that had collapsed inches in front of her.

    Johnathon suddenly glanced back behind them as he heard the noises
of movement suddenly increase in volume.
Whatever was moving around nearby, was

I'd drop the comma after 'nearby'

artists raced for the trees, all efforts of stealth forgotten.
They reached the stand of trees and hid behind one giant trunk, just as
a weasel the size of a luxury car 

D.B: Like a Jaguar? 

Shinnosuke: No. Around here the jaguars are the size of Explorers.

rushed into sight.  It
investigated the deadfall, 

Giant Weasel: HAHAHA!!! Someone actually fell for one of those stupid traps
that kid with no memory sets. 

sight of

Shinosike's 

Spelling looks a little off there.

house, Johnathon came to a halt and
stepped back among the trees.  The half-cat got out a small camp stove
and started to light it.

    "I'd better change back before meeting your friends.  I don't want
to start a fight."  

fight,"

Johnathon explained as he brought out

"Hello, is your name Shinosike?"  Johnathon took a good look
at the young man, who held a push broom in his left hand.

    The young man looked confused.  "Um, yes, I'm Shinosike... What

Again I'd drop the ellipse.

just
happened?"

Johnathon: I already explained it to you. Did you forget?

Shinnosuke: I guess so. That seems to happen a lot to me lately. At least I
think it does.

    Johnathon blinked innocently.  "Hmm?  What do you mean?"

    Shinosike frowned.  "Who are you anyway?  Do I know you?"

    Johnathon smoothly stood and bowed slightly.  "I am Johnathon
Dwire.  I'm afraid we haven't met before, 

It's not like Shin's going to remember anyway.

    The old man clapped his hands together happily.  "Wonderful!  It is
always nice to have company.  I will start dinner.
Akane my dear, would you care to assist?"

You might want to throw in some contractions for the old man. His speech
pattern seems too rigid.

talk to you about something else."  She hesitated.  "Um, why don't we go
have lunch and talk."  She tried to keep from
grimacing.  "My treat."

Nabiki: Kami! That really was like pulling my teeth out with a pair of
pliars.

    Dr. Tofu blinked in surprise.  "Why don't we go dutch, 

I'd make a joke here, but it's too easy.

Nabiki."

Nabiki?"

    Nabiki took another sip of coffee to cover a nervous twitch.  "She's
quite good looking too, isn't she?"

    The good doctor raised an eyebrow at that.  "That's safe enough to
say, I suppose..."  He took a long look at the middle
Tendo sister.  "Nabiki, what are you hinting at?"

Tofu: Never mind. I understand. I think you and Shampoo would make a
wonderful couple, except for the fact I don't think she likes you very
much.

Nabiki facefaults. 

    The phone was picked up almost right away.  "Ucchan's! Can I help
you?"  The okinamiaki 

The first three letters are oko and I'm suddenly blanking on the rest.

crawled out of

her clothing, even as the glass fell to the floor.  <That
stupid Moose 

Mousse

    She and Shampoo turned to go.  Shampoo turned one more time at the
door. to speak. 

door to

    As he did so, a menacing voice came down from the outer wall.
"Dwire!  For all that you have done to my beloved
Shampoo, I will make you pay!  For the humiliation you've dealt to me, I
will destroy you!"

    Everyone looked up to see Mousse standing there, obviously enraged.

Oh, how sweet! Mousse is switching his anger to someone he actually stands
a chance against.

Johnathon then had to dodge a volley of knives.
He quickly shucked off his pack, which was bulging with the cask of
water he'd brought from Ryogensawa.  He then tossed
it towards Akane, even as he dodged a flung chain.  "Here, Akane, keep
that safe!"

    Mousse spotted the rapidly moving black object.  <I have you!>  He
thought as he tossed a pair of weighted chains to
ensnare his enemy.  He then yanked it towards himself.  <Has he lost
weight?>  Mousse heard Ranma, Akane, and his foe
shouting at him.  "No, don't!  Drop it!"  and "I'm here, leave that
alone!"  came from different parts of the yard.  Disregarding
their obvious diversion, Mousse yanked his opponent high into the air.
Leaping to meet his target, he brought out a pair of
giant maces, bringing them swinging into his target.  <Wow... I killed
him?> 

No. You most likely just killed yourself.

Mousse was just stunned enough that he failed
to realize his danger until the three furious martial artists hit him
from all sides as one.

    Mousse collapsed under the triple assault.  Johnathon rushed to the
koi pond where the remains of the backpack had
fallen, but he could see it was no use, the cask had been shattered.  He
leapt at Mousse's fallen form screaming.  "You blind
idiot!"  Ranma and Akane grabbed him to restrain him.  The pair looked
across at each other, surprised at the effort it was
taking to restrain him.  Johnathon was straining, his face red and eyes
flaring.  He was shouting almost incoherently.  "You've
destroyed Kasumi's cure!  I'll kill you!!"

    Akane almost lost her grip as Johnathon smashed her in the chest
with a flailing elbow. 

D.B.: And since her chest was so flat, there was nothing to cushion the
blow.

Akane: D.B. NO BAKA!!!

WHAMWHAMWHAMWHAM

"Oof!  John-san, calm down!"

    Dr. Tofu started to move in behind Johnathon to apply a sleep
Shiatsu, even while a part of him wanted to let him at the
unconscious male amazon.  Kasumi beat him to it though.  She leapt over
to Mousse's chest and meowed worriedly at
Johnathon.

    That seemed to reach him, because he stopped struggling.  "Kasumi."
He said it quietly so that only Akane and Ranma
(and Kasumi probably) could hear it.  He said a little louder.  "OK."

Okay.

His voice was trembling with adrenaline.  "Alright, you

    Dr. Tofu stood up suddenly, his face a mask of determination.  "Not
if I can help it."  He looked strongly at Ranma who
blinked, never having seen the doctor's face so composed.  "Ranma, meet
me at the Cat Cafe tomorrow at noon."  He
looked around at the rest of them,  "You all should be there as well."

Well, it would be a solution to their problems. It'll be interseting if
Tofu's plans go through though.

    Soun and Genma stood together.  "Right!  We'll make the old woman
give us the pill!"

    Soun added.  "My baby won't have to go through this any longer!"

   Genma nodded.  "I'm right behind you old friend."  <If were going to
confront Cologne, I'm _way_ behind you.>

That's more like Genma.

Well, another nice chapter

D.B. Sommer