Well Well Well...another chapter-portion in what I already consider one
of the best Ranma Fanfics out there.
Its certainly up to par.
First off, we have Ranma *CREATING LIFE*...neat trick. We then have her
carving cinderblocks, artfully, with a fan. We then get a lecture on
magic, including what I hope is a seed for the future with Kasumi, and
then we get a joke. (something something something something dragon.
Very Funny). We also have the beginning of what might well be one of the
major conflicts/crises of the work, the whole "Love Story involving two
(apparently) girls" thing. Good way to begin in, on both sides.
What is the excellence of this series? Not only do you have an
_excellent_ writing style, but you seem to have a vision. You may be
overpowering Ranma, something I've never enjoyed, but you seem to be
both A: Making h(im)er more controlled and B:Giving h(im)er scaled
challenges.
Only problem? I always thought that the little origami birds were Swans,
not geese, but I could be A:Misinformed, B:Misremembering, or C:You
could be dealing with an entirely different origami bird.
4c soon, I hope.