Alright. I'm finally (more or less) done with this chapter, to the point 
where I can post it here.

The usual request for C&C applies. Also, there is some stuff I've added 
during the last 4 hours or so, in an attempt to get under the wire for 
GenSao's next archive update. (The possibly-hasty stuff is at the end of 
the bath scene -- the end of part 2/3 and the beginning of part 3/3).

Other specific questions:

Is the lemon scene involving Nagi too short? I have various reasons for 
wanting it as it is, but I've had a couple people say something along the 
lines of "the hentai in me wants this scene to be longer."

Is the "Tenchi tries to convince Aeka not to leave" scene believable?

I've put in some work into developing Kintarou, one of my created 
characters. Commentary on how well I've presented him and how well he fits 
in (or doesn't) would be especially appreciated.

P.S. Oh, and sorry about the long, long wait for this. I promise the next 
chapter won't take anywhere near that long. ^^;;;




Hasheen!

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Happosai (happosai@jps.net), devout member of the Ryoko Forever Fan Club, 
#WASHU# lab assistant in training, and Silver Knight of the Knightly 
Order of Mihoshi Enthusiasts.

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Voted Best Tenchi Muyo Fanfic Spring'98, GenSao's TM! Fanfic Archive!