Mark Patrick Williams wrote:

    Seems I have a bit of a rythmn started here. I post a fic on my off day,
then three days of work keeps me from answering C&C till the fourth day...
then three more days of work... and another reply. Sigh, sorry about the
delay.

hehe...I just got throught reading part 3.  Been reading from part 1 for
about a week now. whew!  this is a long fic.

    Heh, part 3 sort of spiraled out of control for some reason, up to this
point most of my fics fell somewhere between 10 and 20 K... gosh, does this
mean I'm a REAL fic writer now?

Keener, you are a really good writer, you know that? It seems like Ryouga
is almost the bad guy in this fic. That's a surprise, but I think the
little bit of seriousness makes it much more interesting. Just how far

    I'm trying to stay nuetral on Ryouga's actions. Whether he's playing at
being the monster, or has actually become one, or perhaps been one all along.
For this part though, I wanted to give the abyss more of a form, a stronger
hold on his soul and actions. He's been staring into his own id for a long
time, something was invariably bound to start staring back. There's really no
cut good and evil in this fic, just a lot of confusion, pain, and someone
trying to make things up as they go along.

will Ryouga go to get his revenge? hehe.  I hope he doesn't kill himself,
but you know, he's gone so far already, it seems like there's no going
back. There's gotta be something to live for.

    Is there? Ahem, sorry 'bout that ^_^;;

I kinda like how you made Akari and Ryouga break up. That really makes
sense that he knows that he doesn't love her like she loves him. That is a
really hard question to answer even in real life. Can you learn to love
somebody? Is the problem you if you can't love that person? I'm glad that
Ryouga thought about that, becuase I kinda think he would (in the manga I
mean).

    I have a theory about that which I wish I had had a place for it in the
fic. It might pop up in part 4. Still, Akari does make an appearance and will
have a bit more impact later on. I've always had problems with the character
and am using some of this to work through them, still, not to worry, the focus
is rather firmly set on Ryouga.

At first I thought you were going to make Ukyo and Ryouga get together. I
mean, there was definately something there, but why did Ryouga knock
her out? I thought Ryouga had killed her for a second. I don't think she
can forgive him for tearing up her shop. That is all she has is the
Okonomyaki restuarant.

    Hmmmm? I'm curious, what makes you think he didn't kill her? <other then
Zen's looming presence. ^_^;;>

So I guess that in the end of this fic, Ryouga will have nobody? Well, I
guess that's the way it should be. It almost looks like he's going to
die... *sniff* *sniff*

    ...well, I now know the ending so I afraid his destiny, one way or
another, is sealed. As to what that is... I'm not saying.

Suicide, huh? Well, I guess that is one way to make a chi blast that
powerful. I guess there is no way for Ranma to fight something like that.
Maybe he could just dodge it? That would be a easy way to beat it. I bet
Cologne is going to cheat and help him out. :(

    Dodging the blast is not to hard, though it puts out an incredibly strong
field of force around itself... as will come into play later on. As Spiderman
once said in an old Amazing Friends... "He even hits ya when he misses!" As
for Cologne, if she has any tricks up her caroditic artieries, she's yet to
reveal them. Ranma has a teacher, but Ryouga has the "source"... things are
going to start cooking pretty soon.

One thing, left. How can we get the music to listen to during the fic? You
say the theme from MASH? is that like the TV show? I might could find that
one. But the other song to be played during the Jisatsu
Beaa.s...whatever.. where could we find that?

    It's on the first Ruruoni Kenshin CD, though, as the fic gets more into
the heart of the action, might I suggest  either "O Verona" or "Escape From
Mantua" both of which can be found on the "Romeo + Juliet" soundtrack. There's
also "Everybody Knows" from the "Pump Up the Volume" soundtrack, though I'd go
with the original and not the Concrete Blonde cover.

Well, see ya later. Looking forward to part 4. :)  Wish I could write like
that, but I really don't want to try to commit suicide to do that. hehe
Maybe I could think really bad thoughts for a while..hmm....

    Ummm, no. Waking up in a hospital with an IV in your arm <put in BADLY,
freaking nurse> and your hair so full of glass that you cut yourself just
scratching your scalp is NOT fun.

    Thanks for your reply, it was GREATLY appreciated. ^_^