Spoilers ahead...

Sigh... formulaic. Boring. And, like most of its brethren, highly tempting me 
to write a tentacle fic where the guys get it for once. (So why do I read 'em?
You never know when a pearl of originality is going to shine through)

I mean... I felt like I've read this before(and I haven't), because it's so...
so been done. I'm afraid it was all a little to cliche to even be offended
about, let alone interested. Your fic, of course, but then again, my C&C. 
As to formulaic, well, let's look at the ending:

At 03:01  4/11/98 -0500, you wrote:

Giving up, the demon-lord calmed itself, then wrenched her face down,
bending her over, so that it could shove into her mouth, taking her,
while it planned "Well, I guess we'll just have to impregnate as many 
women as we can, to create our own force of invasion."

Its laughter wasn't pretty, and it rolled down for a long time down the
corridors of Furinkan High.

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The end.

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That's hardly a shock ending... what we need is something to throw us off
guard:

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The remaining Senshi looked on from their hiding place, disgust and shock
written
on their face. As Sailor Moon snatched the pen away from Sailor Chibi-moon,
and the
others tried to rub the ink off their skin, Sailor Neptune looked around. 

"Wait, where's Sailor Mercury?"

Moon shrugged. "As soon as she saw the tentacles, she screamed something about
'They always take the intelligent ones first!', and ran off."

Neptune thought about this. "I'm just going to scout the rear."

"The rear of what?" Mars whispered, looking through her Grandpa's Big
Occult Book of
Tentacled Thingys You Don't Want to Meet Until You're Old, Ugly, or Both.
She glanced
up from the book, looked at a demon, muttered "No, only has fifty
tentacles," and 
returned to her identification process.

"The rear of Okinawa." Neptune muttered, slinking off.

"Can I blow up the world now?" Saturn asked, just to prove that the author
hadn't
forgotten she was a Senshi too and to remind everyone that, thank God, she
was not 
below in the action.

"No!" The others hissed.

"Sailor Pluto," Moon whispered, tearing her gaze away from the naughty
stuff going on 
below, "did you know this was going to happen?"

"No," Pluto said authoratively as she rechecked the shiny new locks on her
adamantium
chastity belt, "I had no idea."

"We need a plan," Mars decided.

"I could blow up the world," Saturn suggested.

"That doesn't involve blowing up the world," Mars asserted.

Saturn sweated for a full minute, straining at the idea, before her face
lit up.
"I could blow up another world!"

They all sighed. Another minute passed. Then, Moon grinned. "I have a plan!"

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"I suppose this is a bad time to ask," Generic Sex Demon #1 muttered as it
looked
down at Kasumi, "but you don't have any... uh... diseases I should know
about?"

The peaceful scene of rape was shattered when someone tossed a naked
Chibi-Usa into
the room.

"Argh! My eyes!" one demon screamed, waving its protrubences ineffectually.

"The evil! The evil!" a second burbled, backing against a wall.

"I'll never be able to look at another woman again without remembering
that!" another
sobbed, as its tentacles deflated like popped balloons.

One monster would have turned green, if it wasn't that colour already. 

"Someone make the hurting stop! Please!" the demon lord begged of the
world, its
eyes fixed on a sight too terrible to bear.

"Psst, here," a blonde urchin whispered, holding up a couple of pieces of
paper to
the demon. "Paper blindfolds. Only two bob a piece, guvnor."

The demon lord blinked, wondering where the urchin had come from. It looked
around,
saw that other urchins where handing out the paper strip blindfolds, and
suspicion
started to fester.

"Has anyone seen my panties?" Chibi-Usa called out. 

"Augh! Alright! Alright! I'll take your blindfolds!" It slapped the money
into the
urchin's hand, swiping the blindfolds with the same motion.

"Funny," the demon lord mused as he put the paper into place over his eyes,
"these feel 
more like demon wards than blindfolds..." Realisation set in. "oh damn."

As the dust of the dead demon lord and its cronies swirled away, the urchin
twirled
a disguise pen, and flashed a victory sign. "I told you those wards your
grandfather 
was trying to make you sell off would come in handy one day, Sailor Mars."

And so the day was won, and afterwards all the girls probably had a mass
orgy - except
for Sailor Mercury, who was arrested later that day in Hokaido for swiping
at passersby
with a tree branch, screaming things like "Giant penises are trying to take
over the
world!"

The End.

"So..." Sailor Saturn drawled. "Can I blow up the world _now_?"

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(Yes, it is petty. But I think a lot of people reading the fic would probably
thank me for the laugh right about now...)

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Mark Doherty - mdoherty@uq.net.au
http://www.tass.org/mdoherty/index.html

Everything I learned, I learned from fanfics Number 10:
Polygamy - good. Monogamy - bad.