HAHAHAHA...FUNNY! Some comments:

Forget it, he would worry about that later- it was time for him to begin the
chant. He quickly looked up a particular spell and began chanting...

"Um, 'Darkness beyond twilight, crimson beyond blood that flows. Buried in the
flow of time..

Frankly, you could stop right here and I'd be terrified.

Everyone remained a safe distance from Kasumi and Dr. Tofu, as they walked
behind them. Kasumi had elected to go as a bridesmaid, which struck everybody
as stunning and even struck Dr. Tofu senseless. On the other hand, Dr. Tofu
was supposed to be some superhero, but his costume were in rags. He had
shredded them long time ago when Kasumi stopped by to kick him up for the
Halloween party, but Dr. Tofu did not mind as he stuttered as he admired the
beauty of Kasumi.

Ah... So THAT's the kind of relationship they have. Perhaps you mean
"pick him up"?
 

"Hiya, Ran-chan!" Ukyo bounced into sight, displaying her adorable figure
enclosed in a sexy Playboy bunny outfit and embraced Akane cheerfully. "I'm so
glad that you came--" She stopped taking when she realized that the Ranma she
was hugging felt differently stepped back to stare into Akane's face for a
moment, then gasped. "Akane? How--?"

The dreaded Gainax Bunny Ear Syndrome (TM That Rossman Guy) strikes
again
 

A clown glomped to Shampoo for the hundredth time as Mousse exclaimed happily,
"Shampoo! I love you, Shampoo!" A kick later, he found himself sailing though
the sky. Shampoo quickly turned around only to find out that Ranma and Akane
had disappeared into the building.

So what's Mousse's costume?...OH, you mean he's DRESSED as a clown.
 
Right about here....

It wasn't fair! Why can't she have any fun?! Slightly angry, Ranma hurled an
insult at Akane. Akane retorted and she screamed about being called
unkawaiiune. It was all an act, of course; but everybody had been fooled. It
didn't take long for things to stir up again after that when Shampoo sensed an
opportunity and bounced up to Akane, purring slightly as she offered a cup to
her. Akane took the cup and paused.

Akane eyed smiling Shampoo suspiciously, certain that she was up to something.
She knew that Cologne and Shampoo wouldn't pass up a chance to ensnare Ranma
as Shampoo's bride. But it appeared to her that Shampoo was completely unaware
of the fact that she was offering her drink to Akane, not to Ranma.

And right through here-
The names you use get a bit confusing: In the first paragraph of the
two, it seems like you're calling them by their costume names (Ranma
makes fun of Akane, but its all an act, etc.) but in the second you
revert to real names...Also, the whole thing is a bit confusing. I'd
offer suggestions, but I'm not QUITE sure what you WANT to say. 

The oni smoked around a corner quietly.

His target was within his reach. He could feel him, and the feeling of
anticipation filled him. Soon, he would prove to the world that he was the
mightiest being! After the Kamis, of course.

"Now, which room is he in?"

"Puu!" A white creature with red jewel embedded on its forehead chirped.

"Where?"

"Puu! Puu!"

"WHERE?!"

"PUU!"

"Forget I asked."

<BLINK>...Random Mokona Cameo..Just a BIT too weird..funny, but very out
of place

As she was about to prepare her latest sleeping potion for her unsuspecting
enemies, a blue and orange blur knocked into her, crying out about cats.
Knocked aside by the running female, the sister lost the hold on her sleeping
potion and involuntarily inhaled the fine mist. Moments later, she dropped to
the ground, unconscious.

That's one way to remove Kodachi from action...

Akane raised her hand and was about to slap Ranma for his insult when a girl
with long green hair, wearing two-piece tiger-skin suit slowly appeared out of
the ground. The girl regarded the girls curiously, "Hey, wouldn't you two
happen to have seen Atari, would you?"

The girls shook their head dumbly, and Lum sighed. Why did Atari have to be
so... lecherous? She thanked them and flew to the next floor and vanished,
leaving Ranma and Akane staring at the ceiling.

I assume you mean AtarU...unless, of course, Lum is now after a
perverted game-system.

"BWAHAHAHAHAHA! I'm what others call a "DANGEROUS AND REALLY, REALLY POWERFUL
ONI", BUT YOU MAY CALL ME DRRO FOR SHORT!! PREPARE TO DIE!!" With that, the
smoke surged forth to attack.

Perhaps you mean DRRPO? Unless, of course, "DRRO" has no relation to his
full name.

Ryoga glanced down and saw IT.

Chibi-Usa looked up and smiled at him.

Ryoga screamed in the basement.

OK. This beats out the RMC (See above) for vileness

The end, not quoted due to length:
A: We enter super-cameo mode+Super random Ranmacharacter mode (Nikkumen,
fat lady, etc.)
B: Random stuff Happens
Funny

David Siegel
dhs28@columbia.edu
"There is CLEARLY no chicken in that backpack."