At 04:21 PM 10/23/98 -0700, "Jonathan C. Tsoi" wrote:

*snip*

Some reason I think Kasumi should be offended by this statement...

"No, I haven�t seen her.  Would you like me to help look for her

oniichan?" Akane

asked.  (Line 45)

For you that can't see the problem... Akane just called Kasumi "oniichan"

(big

brother)...

No, Akane just asked if Kasumi wants her to help look for Ranma's big brother.

Change "oniichan" to "oneechan" and put a comma in front of it:

<....help look for her, oneechan?" Akane asked.>

Venkarel
(who wonders why this 'fic was posted as a Word file)



Venkarel's Rambling Guide to Fushigi Yuugi, etc. 
http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/Pagoda/6705/fy.html 
major update 10/23/98

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