From: ACheng@webb.org
To: <ffml@fanfic.com>, <Artemis312@hotmail.com>
Subject: [FFML] Wings of Beauty Chapter 1
Date: Thu, 24 Sep 1998 22:51:01 -0700

"Um....  I'm Apollo.  My I ask=97"

That should read "Um . . . I'm Apollo.  May I ask=97"

14?  21?  100?  1000?

Numbers should be spelld out.

So how was it?  My very first fanfic ever!  It's not just going to be 

AMG

either, it's gonna have other anime too!  Stay tuned for more!  

Comments

and constructive criticism would greatly be appreciated.  I'll admit 

it's

fairly short, but it's my first shot!  So please forgive me!

-Apollo Cheng

That's your first try? Not bad, although only later chapters will reveal 
your full interpretation of the characters. Just one more thing, if this 
is boarding school how did your character convince the faculty to not 
rip down his posters?

- Shakudo

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