On Critique:
Well, still no actual critique, but I have recieved some useful comments 
(sadly, about 90% are negative). Anyway, thanks. I really needed that. 

On Plotlessness:
There were several comments on how plotless the story was. I'm not sure 
what the "plotless" means, but I'll have to assume you read something 
other than my fic. There is a clearly visible plot behind it, and I'm 
wondering why it would be plotless. Could someone point out where the 
"plotlessness" comes in? Thanks.

On the flatness of the characters due to script format:
I'm not sure why this came to me as a comment. I tried to present the 
multi-faceted characters in the same manner anime presents it, via 
showing, not telling. Are anime characters flat? Hmm. Don't think so. So 
like, um, why would mine be?

On characterization:
Was it really that bad? I mean, I spent about two whole episodes 
developing the characters. Am I doing something wrong?

Update:
This fic is on hold until Long Ngo finishes his fic. Until then, I'll be 
working on the prose version. I'm doing this to meet popular demand, and 
I'm going to say right now that this wasn't meant for prose. The scene 
development can only occur in anime style, and if translated to prose, 
some things may be lost.

SeventhOne

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